____ Fallen once again ____

 

Standing here, besides the sea
Besides the ocean, of her memory
Besides the rocks on the sand
Where you once wrote her name
You wonder, you wonder why
Keep staring at the stars in the sky
You toss the stones, thinking
How far they can fly
How big a splash can make
Create a ripple, so high
That smears everything
But then, you give a sigh

You see the light, reflecting
Your emotions, already deflecting
Somewhere deep beneath the sea
Lies the very mystery
But you can’t reach out
And take the chance
To see what’s inside
This gloomy, sad trance
And so it comes
To this place
Where it all began
And wipe up every trace

Here it goes, yet again
And you keep telling yourself, you know
But you have fallen
Yet again, swift and slow
You knew what was coming
And you keep telling yourself, to show
That you can come up with a plan
To extract your highs, from your low
And you’ve failed
Yet again
And you have learnt
Nothing, again

How could the clouds fly?
With tears so heavy, severe
How could you let that happen?
And question yourself, in fear
Why can’t we let go
Let go and never come back
Let go and never repeat
Fast forward that track
But we don’t, and reap the rewards
With pain and crumble on feet of ours
You have changed is what you feel
Cursing the days, minutes and hours

The smile that was once there
Is a distant memory, forgotten!
But you keep on living
Like a corpse, dead and rotten
And for what
And why
I don’t say that you quit
And never try
But if you can see
The roads
The ways
Then you find out
Why your heart sways

Your heart’s true
And true to you
And again, it’s the heart
That kills you

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

gah. I've read each stanza twice in a row to really let it sink in...and each is just as crippling as the last. Actually....the LAST stanza itself twists the knife a bit. This is so solemn, so sad. Oh, Atif, I know you are in such pain. Revisiting the place...revisiting the space that held so many fond memories. I can see you there, where her name was written in the sand, and feel the ocean mist rising. This piece is so full of strong emotion that I can't help but sink into it. I feel for you, my friend. This is a terrible place to be, and it hurts me to know you are there. I wish you all the best, though I think this piece shows you've already lost it. : ( Extremely heart-wrenching. (((many hugs))) Exquisite poetry, my friend. You've melted my heart.

[Celtic Cat]

OH MY GOSH...........I HAVE TO COME BACK TO THIS TOMORROW...WHEN I HAVE PROPER TIME TO DISCECT IT AND GIVE A PROPER REVIEW. Right now I can only give you this: it leaves me breathless and my heart is now having a hard time beating. Wow, Atif, just wow. I'll be back!

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Amazing poem!
I really enjoyed it!
You are a great writer!
A silly one at that : )*

[Brianna Brie]

That you can come up with a plan
To extract your highs, from your low
The smile that was once there
Is a distant memory, forgotten!
But you keep on living
Like a corpse, dead and rotten

At first I thought this was a story about a specific person's tragedy. Intrigued I wanted to read on to find out the story. By the end I thought this was more of a general reflection of the reader's life. I liked the images your created in my mind.

[Brette Medb]

A pretty acurate outlook of emotions getting the better of oneself although I'm not sure that one can die from a broken heart... although that's what depression is isn't it? Great write.


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