Serenity

These are poetic pros from the perspective of an addict

 

Adel-

 "God grant me the serenity to except the things I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference."

  The serenity prayer. AA's pronounced shiboleth, The one drunks say before spilling their guts over weak, steaming joe. The one that steadys their shaking hands while they remember rock bottom.

 Addict-[n.] To give ones self up to some strong habit - 2. To cause someone to become addicted to some habit, a person addicted to some habit, esp. the use of narcotics.

  I am not an addict in the traditional sense.

  The only pills I pop are centrizine, celexa, and hydroxicut.

  The only things I drink are coffee, coke (of the diet persuasion), and water

  The only thing I smoke is Marlbro 27's.

  It did, however, mention one becoming addicted to a habit.

  "God grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change."

  Cannot

  Cannot

  Cannot

  Cannot cahnge, cannot get out of this terrifying cycle, this perpetual state of ennui

  I am trapped.

Author's Note

This is the first part of a 3 part play. Just tell me what you think and BE HONEST!!!

Reviews

[adekmrsuy]

I love the concept! It has the potential to be a powerful and thought provoking performance.

I like how the dialogue was able to capture the denial and powerlessness. The repetition of "cannot" added the dramatic edge and helped me to envision the performance. Some parts of the dialogue seemed disconnected additional stage directions could help make it clearer if that was merely for a dramatic effect.

Also in regards to stage directions, I have seen plays with three actors use a triangle formation center stage to enhance a performance. Since your drawing on AA inspiration perhaps incorporated chairs would be appropriate. Wasn't sure if you were just interpreting an inner dialogue or if it was set at an AA meeting.

Just some thoughts, can't wait to read the other parts.

[Xye Nelson]

Its th internal battle of an addict. Adel has an eating disorder, something that i have struggled with for nearly 4 years now, i just got out of a 6 month stay at a treatment facility december 30th, and i still struggle.
Thank you for the advice, i will definatly add more stage directions.