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One night my thoughts come rushing through my head when I really should be in bed, playing dead instead.

I'm up on this laptop, finding unproductive things to do, blasting blue and green, hoping to write something that no one has seen.

I got to another boring checkpoint in my life, where everything I do feels the same. I'm tamed, like another civilian getting by.  I'm thinking far too much to write again, goodbye.

But I know I can't rest at that.  Times goes on, and my mind won't shut down.  I need to ground and pound, screaming out loud so I can hear no more sound.

Reviews

[kitty]

Ha this is very relatable. xD

[Stephen]

If it's a poem, as it's showing, then i'd say, "write poems in phrases, stanzas" because it does look better even it does show that it's a poem because poems're always written into phrases or stanzas.

Now come to the point, I like the concept. All the night when I think about this "Wicked World" then sometimes me too think the same, my mind screams such kinda random thoughts and I always try to transform 'em all into the words to let my feelings, emotions go express into my stuffs. And I found here you did a great job, the emotions and the desperate feelings are well expressed through this poem. I like the concept especially your rhyme.

Keep it up!

[Russ Smith]

I liked at and felt I could relate to this.
My personal opinion with poetry is I have to feel the emotion that is trying to be portrayed in the piece, or have experienced similar to understand it and like it. With this I felt I could relate and understand so I did enjoy it.
Nice work! Keep it up.

[Flarare Weet]

Oh...thanks for reviewing this random piece, I wasn't expecting anyone to check it out. It was just a little thing I wrote to test out how the writerscafe.org profile system worked. I still appreciate it though - thanks! And keep up with the Avenyx story, I really did enjoy it.