not your best piece

Not your best piece kid.
sorry there's the trash I'll open up the lid.
are you sure?
did you read it to the end?
it was terrible stupid where do I begin.
your grammar is sloppy.
look at this verse its way too jotty .
just give up kid don't even try.
who's gunna read it let alone buy.
I actually barely read this garbage gritting my teeth.
give it up kid this is not your best piece

Reviews

[C. Rose]

I like this one. It is humble and funny and I think a feeling most writer's can relate to.
Even if the relaxed grammar is to make a point, I recommend breaking this into lines so it's easier to read.

Do you post from your phone? The majority of grammar issues are just spaces and capitalization which can be ridiculous on a phone.

[C. Rose]

Thanks. Much nicer.

[C. Rose]

I like that this is a smidge of hope. "Not your best piece" implies that you can write better things and improve. Though generally is a mean thing to say.

[fitz Roberts]

Yah but that's why were here is to learn and grow from our writing it does look much better point being but my writing as your writing should be to be crictcized say its terrible and I'll write better and with more passion but I also have don't care what you think and best piece or not I'll always find something to jot

[fitz Roberts]

Lmao don't care what you think attitude lol I care what you think rose Lmao help me grow

[fitz Roberts]

Thanx rose helping me grow

[fitz Roberts]

Yah I post from my phone and I did purposely relax the grammar more and your right about the lines I noticed that today letting ppl read it FROM my phone how it was hard to grasp at first thanx for the tip

[fitz Roberts]

Lmao eh I've wrote worse √√√

[fitz Roberts]

Lmao yah I tried real hard on this one thanx

[Eric]

Oh the irony - it probably is! ;)