The First

The First

A Poem by Fish

He was the first to smile.
He was the first to hold your hand.
He was the first to steal a kiss from your lips.
He was the first to actually look in your eyes.
He was the first to tell you "You're Beautiful".
He was the first person you actually believed.
He was the first to steal your heart.
He was the first to take down all your walls.
He was your first.
He was the first to break you.
He was the first to cry.
He was the first to tell you he's not ready.
He was the first to run away.
He was the first to leave you with an angel.
He was the first to come back.
He was the first to care.

© 2016 Fish


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Not a bad poem. You here talk of a boy who was the first to do so and so with a girl. Good repetition.
Your poem tells the whole story, how the two are on the verge of a relationship, but then the guy leaves, and then he comes back- all of it gives a happy ending to your poem.
You could have added some other lines without using "he was the first" or you could have written 4-odd stanzas where the last or the first line is "He was the first..."- just friendly advice.
Good, though. Keep writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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