Simmer down

Simmer down

A Poem by James Paulin
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Haiku

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green drabs to tan tint

long sun stunts by and goodbye

heat lingers lazy

© 2010 James Paulin


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elemental swirls drape their tactile movements across the metaphorical shoulders of the audience~ sensate as sensate can be~ lustrous lovely composition~

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very creative Haiku on Autumn, capturing the colour, temprature, and light. Nice!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


A nice haiku. Twitches those lazy nerves.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That first line is beautiful! And it leads nicely into the rest of the poem. Sweet and lovely.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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an interesting view of Autumn :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Beautiful atmosphere in this haiku. I love that the heat pours out of this and the imagery feels so warm. Well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Like Eden to dust... Very nice. I can definitely feel the heat in this one.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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The long hot days of a lazy August Summer. Great image in this haiku.

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oh, and the hand of a friend

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Added on August 6, 2010
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James Paulin
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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are .. more..

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