gilded moon

gilded moon

A Poem by James Paulin
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haiku

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wisp veiled orb aglow

seductive in summer damp

nocturnal amuse

© 2010 James Paulin


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Oh this is so good. Congrats on this great haiku.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one awakens old feelings I had as a teenager, arm around my girl and watching the moon rise through my '54 Ford's windshield.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mmm delicious................ hope you don't mind me using that adjective~

Posted 14 Years Ago


love it! u must be the Lord of words :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


beautifully done

Posted 14 Years Ago


Simple syllable selection stands corrected. Thank you Fran and Wicahapi.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Perfect :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Beautiful Haiku, James, but you need to add 1 syllable
in the first line please~ even though there are 5 vowels
which usually will give you the correct count the second e in "Veiled" is silent

Great Pen and I really liked this!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on June 27, 2010
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James Paulin
James Paulin

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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are .. more..

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