gilded moon
A Poem by
James Paulin
haiku
wisp veiled orb aglow
seductive in summer damp
nocturnal amuse
© 2010 James Paulin
Reviews
Oh this is so good. Congrats on this great haiku.
Posted 14 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This one awakens old feelings I had as a teenager, arm around my girl and watching the moon rise through my '54 Ford's windshield.
Posted 14 Years Ago
This one awakens old feelings I had as a teenager, arm around my girl and watching the moon rise through my '54 Ford's windshield.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
mmm delicious................ hope you don't mind me using that adjective~
Posted 14 Years Ago
mmm delicious................ hope you don't mind me using that adjective~
love it! u must be the Lord of words :)
Posted 14 Years Ago
love it! u must be the Lord of words :)
beautifully done
Posted 14 Years Ago
beautifully done
Simple syllable selection stands corrected. Thank you Fran and Wicahapi.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Simple syllable selection stands corrected. Thank you Fran and Wicahapi.
Perfect :)
Posted 14 Years Ago
Perfect :)
Beautiful Haiku, James, but you need to add 1 syllable
in the first line please~ even though there are 5 vowels
which usually will give you the correct count the second e in "Veiled" is silent
Great Pen and I really liked this!
Posted 14 Years Ago
Beautiful Haiku, James, but you need to add 1 syllable
in the first line please~ even though there are 5 vowels
which usually will give you the correct count the second e in "Veiled" is silent
Great Pen and I really liked this!
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Added on June 27, 2010
Last Updated on July 26, 2010
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James Paulin MI
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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are ..
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