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A Poem by
James Paulin
black sky, sparked white
stars
slips of wind tone
flitter
wafted fragrance
lilac, lavender
parch quenched
iced water
sweet tang impart
ripe mango
intimate acceptance
love
© 2010 James Paulin
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so simple but it creates a beautiful picture
i love this stile and i realy can not write in it
so over all i love this great, wonderful, fantastic
Posted 15 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Very simple but strong emotions create a romantic view here. I love this piece.
Thank you for the share.
Babs xx
Posted 15 Years Ago
Very simple but strong emotions create a romantic view here. I love this piece.
Thank you for the share.
Babs xx
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I can almost taste and smell the essense created here.
Nicely weaved!
Posted 15 Years Ago
I can almost taste and smell the essense created here.
Nicely weaved!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
you've put desire bare in a beautiful background and it carries like the sweetest melody ever carried on the wind.
Posted 15 Years Ago
you've put desire bare in a beautiful background and it carries like the sweetest melody ever carried on the wind.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Wondrous moment caught in few words, even wind is not blowing at night for sun is not heating the earth and causing convection; unless it is a storm. I liked that.
Posted 15 Years Ago
Wondrous moment caught in few words, even wind is not blowing at night for sun is not heating the earth and causing convection; unless it is a storm. I liked that.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Some gorgeous sounds in this... I read the third four times I liked the way it sounded so much. Hmmm... almost like a meditating effect. Lovely.
Posted 15 Years Ago
Some gorgeous sounds in this... I read the third four times I liked the way it sounded so much. Hmmm... almost like a meditating effect. Lovely.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
thanks for the explanation.......not as sharp in reading as i should have been....
nice!
Posted 15 Years Ago
thanks for the explanation.......not as sharp in reading as i should have been....
nice!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
just the high notes...just great...
Posted 15 Years Ago
just the high notes...just great...
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Added on March 18, 2010
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James Paulin MI
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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are ..
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