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A Poem by James Paulin

black sky, sparked white

stars

 

slips of wind tone

flitter

 

wafted fragrance

lilac, lavender

 

parch quenched

iced water

 

sweet tang impart

ripe mango

 

 

 

 

 

intimate acceptance      

love                                                                                                                     

© 2010 James Paulin


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so simple but it creates a beautiful picture
i love this stile and i realy can not write in it
so over all i love this great, wonderful, fantastic

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very simple but strong emotions create a romantic view here. I love this piece.
Thank you for the share.
Babs xx

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can almost taste and smell the essense created here.
Nicely weaved!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you've put desire bare in a beautiful background and it carries like the sweetest melody ever carried on the wind.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wondrous moment caught in few words, even wind is not blowing at night for sun is not heating the earth and causing convection; unless it is a storm. I liked that.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Some gorgeous sounds in this... I read the third four times I liked the way it sounded so much. Hmmm... almost like a meditating effect. Lovely.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thanks for the explanation.......not as sharp in reading as i should have been....
nice!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

just the high notes...just great...

Posted 15 Years Ago



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James Paulin
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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are .. more..

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