Sub-Zero

Sub-Zero

A Poem by James Paulin
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Monosyllabic poetry craft

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Frost bite freeze,

blown cold fare,

each breath smokes

rime.

Sharp chill cuts

bone down deep,

an ice edge

shiv.

 

© 2009 James Paulin


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If there was a description for eating dry ice it would be this.
Very chilling, with the structure and in the descriptions.

"Sharp chill cuts
bone down deep,
an ice shiv."
Loving that. I have never heard of 'monosyllabic' poetry before, but I don't know a lot to start with hahaha. Oooh, got the munches!

*nom nom dry ice nom*

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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If there was a description for eating dry ice it would be this.
Very chilling, with the structure and in the descriptions.

"Sharp chill cuts
bone down deep,
an ice shiv."
Loving that. I have never heard of 'monosyllabic' poetry before, but I don't know a lot to start with hahaha. Oooh, got the munches!

*nom nom dry ice nom*

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wonderful!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Now we are good!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

an icy edge: you have one syllable too many, four instead of three. If you could fix it, you have a great chance because this is a very good poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is wonderful , the bite, the smoke..condensed excellence!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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James Paulin
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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are .. more..

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