Heartstrings

Sonnet

United or divided lines of love

Longings of heart seeking satisfaction

Upright and free, a gift from above

Or impulsive whims, a cosmetic attraction

 

Many an interest captivates desire

Bearing real joys or falsely deceiving

Square wooden pegs fatigue and tire

Chafing round holes worn to receiving

 

Heartstrings grow strong in bright daylight

Darkness tangles and weakens their way

Deep within resides honest insight

Give of yourself, a sweet song to play

Celebrate always in all that is true

Thee before me is loving returned anew

 

Reviews

[Eternally Elemental]

Like I said, I'm not much for forms and structures myself. I love when people pull them off really well. You pulled this off really well even though I don't understand what sonnets are.
I like the contemplating at the beginning. The questioning and the reasoning of what love can be.
Is that an erotic underlay with the square pegs? Or is that me being really bad? :S I kind of assumed that considering it is straight after 'real joys or falsely deceiving'. That suggests the true heartfelt feeling or the physical attraction that is only sexual desire and nothing more.

The last three lines are my favorite. Maybe because I believe more in celebrating what is true rather than succumbing to the dark tangles.
Really loved this poem. "Thee before me is loving returned anew" - my favorite line and perfect closing.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Beautiful Sonnet James. Congrats on this winning Sonnet.

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Very nice job, you hit both the ten syllables and a lot of feminine rhymes. I think you have a nice consistency in your writing, it is an easy read. And just to be picky, this is an English (Shakespearean) sonnet, not just a sonnet.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A wonderful sonnet. Very nice form.