Escape

Cameo

drift off

mental refreshment

turquoise water and sugar sand

mild, soft wind

alone in paradise awhile

compose and collect fresh thoughts

return

 

Reviews

[Eternally Elemental]

Sweet sand, huh? I dig :3

Mild soft wind... reminds me of honey. Can you imagine breathing honey?! That would be awesome!

It's like a single deep breath with eyes closed and opening them again to return to reality. I think everyone would hold their breath for longer if they could.
Beautiful picture. I like how Kerry put it: "wash, rinse, repeat" haha. A pleasure reading.

[Tina Kline]

Very beautiful. It has such a peaceful fill about it.

[Gandré]

This is kind of ZEN like poem, to become empty in mind "drift off mental refreshment", very nice sweet cameo. The fresh thoughts come after you rested lying down in your sugar sand.I liked this!

[Scarlet Pulse]

Although the poem was short, it was good in many ways. You have a couple of moments where you use imagery and metaphors, etc. I would love to feel the escape more, and maybe the steps to the escape etc. Good job.

[Jane Prinsep]

Such a lovely, simple, atmospheric, tantalising piece of writing!

Just a few words that capture a whole world of imagination. You paint enough detail for the reader, but then let them drift away with their own imagination. This is a really clever technique and one I don't see very much.

I really do love this, well done.

Jane

[Sasavet]

So simple but so thorough. I love this, and it really reminds me of how effectively being by the seaside can clear your mind, and this was the perfect portrait. Thanks for sharing, good write :)

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning Cameo!

[Kerry]

Love the flow of this piece. Reminds me of the "wash, rinse, repeat" instructions on my shampoo bottle. Sometimes we have to remind ourselves to breath. Nicely done!