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I wrote this stream of consciousness out in East Hampton; Long Island.

I can't feel but trapped under this vast, endless pattern of stars and sounds amidst a long stretch of highway; far detached from civilization. Is it my fault I feel so alone here? The soft sounds of the serene night pulse with obscurity that I have heard before however, vaguely.

   

Jasmine hints across my senses; folded with thick scents of embedded asphalt, but can I breathe this peace?

 

I am alone with many voices in my head, speaking the same language, whispering with the same tongue. Creeping behind me a past full of screams and torturous taunts of childhood nightmares. In front of me splayed a million paths layered in a vicious and violent sea. Whose turn is it?

 

The tide is right and the waves of ample height to ride the free pull of the moons gravity. I feel that nature says more than what I hear in the crashing crests of the waves, commandeering the sand, eroding time and memory.

 

Speak to me more often than I am willing to listen, oh Mother of Urstoff. Where shall I be delivered in the places between the stars and along the sullen shoreline?

 

Reviews

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

Unwillingly I admit to this: I am at a lost for structured tellings. From the opening words, my interest is and to the closing it still lasts. Truly amazing write, nostalgic and a temptation at hallow in it's wake. I must say, if words may allow, I love this piece.

[Frontier]

Jasmine hints across my senses; folded with thick scents of embedded asphalt- seems like such an interesting smell! :D

I like the part of many voices but its the same language, its like the speaker's sense of time is splayed out to every direction.
This line is also really great " I feel that nature says more than what I hear in the crashing crests of the waves, commandeering the sand, eroding time and memory." I would love to read more from you.

[Hinoto]

beautiful. love your poem.

[koty bell]

Duuude this was deeeeeeeeeep! Nice work man:)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Much enjoyed! Loved the imagery, and your style is awesome!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Absolutely beautiful love the imagery and the emotions in this.

[Andrea]

This is a breathtaking read. I absolutely adore your imagery. All the different pieces of your poem come together great.

[JustAlex]

Wow.....this is seriously beautiful and well written
every word flows together creting an outstanding picture
i like it very much
simply wonderful :)
look foward to reading more of your writes :)

[Introspective Mind]

Lovely prosaic form with intense poetic conveying....
Dreams shine those silvery crests of moments that rise and die within infinite form of time...some would kiss those dunes....wipe those ignored footprints on the shore...some would just leave some glimmers...in the midst of an incomprehensible eddy of motion...of stars and galaxies--some known..some unknown..some dreamt...a few hearts are filled...a few are emptied...
Alone I stare around...and feel being sucked into a great whirlpool...to seek pleasure in losing all delusions of life...
Very deep revelation indeed !
Best regards,