The reason I walk in the rain

Changing my tone a little, to stay sharp...

 

How do you distinguish me from the rain?

 

I fall just as insignificant (to you)

And get walked on just as much (by you)

Ignored by some

Annoyed by many

An inconvenience to all

 

Although I have traveled

I have my destiny-

To land hard

but barely make a splash

Then to be forgotten as I dry up

Until the next time

I enter your life so ‘abruptly’

 

When you see me arrive

you run for cover

and under your breath

you curse me

 

So how do you distinguish me from the rain?

 

I may arrive tomorrow

Or I may not (hopefully I won’t, right?)

Rainy days make you sad…

But you were always that way

Maybe I help you see yourself

And you don’t like what you see

Because puddles

Can reflect like a mirror (But distorted are your eyes)

 

However, like the rain-

 

I was created by God

And just as beautiful

To those who are willing

 

 

To accept me and the rain 

 

 

 

As we are

Reviews

[Gandré]

...this was something what I take with me, when I leave this site. Touching and beautiful, I wish you good luck. I voted for you. Gandr�. my favorite lines were: ..because it is soo very difficult to be happy with unsignificance and accept only without wanting.

I fall just as insignificant (to you)
And get walked on just as much (by you)
Ignored by some
Annoyed by many
An inconvenience to all

[Her Beautiful Melanchol..]

You came up with a poem that is metaphoric yet the message is very clearly understood.
... but I do think that the rain is significant. never thought of it the other way around. ^^-Lia

[Damien Dsoul]

It's contemplative, objective and modest in tone and imagery. The feeling is un-emotional with candour and simplicity.

[Mercury Mirrors]

I love the imagery...And I love the rain...surprisingly though, I can never see myself in puddles XD. Very good job though!

[lilain]

This is beautifully done and I love the parallels you've drawn with yourself and the rain. It isn't too much or too cliche - you've balanced it well. (Strange that it should be raining as I read this - and, well, I don't mind the rain)

All Best,
lilain

[TamiViolet]

What a brilliant metaphor, Jason. Don't we all feel like this sometimes? Acceptance...
I fancy so many can relate to this, wanting to be loved...... for who we are...
exceptional imagery...And by the way.... I love the rain...
X

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

I have to say that this really caught my attention from the start. The more I read, the more I was paralyzed. I really like how it was so easy to read and how it flowed so nicely, but the message in it was so abrupt and so bold that there was no way to miss it. It's like a slap in the face with something soft. It's there to make you realize what the hell is going on but it gives you a chance to figure it out before the end. It's a hard doze of reality taken with the sweetest of honey. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing.

"I fall just as insignificant" ----- insignificantly.

[ANNA]

"Maybe I help you see yourself
And you don't like what you see
Because puddles
Can reflect like a mirror" LOVED IT!!!

Right on! love that part..Very good and beautiful ending with putting in "I was created by God
And just as beautiful
To those who are willing"

Wonderful poem..I alway injoy reading what you come up with
Thank you for sending me a review
Anna-

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful ending - uplifting after the melancholic beginning. Oh, to be thought of as rain and not pranced about in like the wonder that is surely a tragedy. Lovely write. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha