The breeze from the ocean

 

I like to watch her while she sleeps,

The rhythm of her breathing-

And the rhythm of her heart;

Her chest moves a subtle beat,

And I wonder what she is dreaming about.

 

Her blonde hair is fanned out on white feather pillow;

Sleeping on her side, facing the view of the ocean;

From her bedroom window blows a gentle sea breeze;

As the soft silk curtains dance slowly with the summer night.

 

Behind the closed lids cover her green eyes,

Eyes that I have stared into,

Seeing the hope of a spring day;

I know they hold the memories…

 

I like to watch her while she sleeps,

And as the wind blows a breeze from the ocean,

I wonder if she’s dreaming of me,

And how I can see…

So much -

From so high above.

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

awwwwwwwwwwww!!!! this is lovely. you paint the pictures so beautifully - i agree with Rain when he said he could see the curtains move... it was like i was right there, with the ocean breeze and everything soft and white and delicate and dream-like. lovely lovely :)

[Glamorous Eyes]

I can see this image so clear and feel the passion you have for her. It was written so beautifully.Thank you for sharing it with us.

[Rain]

Beautiful. The room was alive, I saw the curtains move, I felt your love. Great piece. Rain..

[Midnight Rose ~*Anna Ro..]

Wow. I'm amazed by how beautiful this is. Awesome write.

[THE BLACK SEAL]

this is very nice.

[justjenn_2u]

A mezmorizing poem, full of longing and want. To gaze at someone you love and want to know their thoughts, beautiful. Way to go!

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, this is really such a beautiful piece. It made me think of loved one -who has passed- looking down from heaven. Great write.

jkb

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A beautiful poem .. the last line makes me think the narrator of this poem is not living ..
The images are so very beautiful.. i like the ocean and this poem is going to be a fav..thanks ..

Chloe
xoxo

[Shadows of Sight]

I liked this! Beautiful imagery and the words spoke of a deep love. I seemed that it was writen from the view of someone who had passed on and was looking down apon her. I thought that was a unique way of doing this! kudos!
It flowed well and each line wanted me to read the next. GReat Job! :)