Death need not end this affair

Death need not end this affair

True my love lie there and I here

And the light shines brighter from my stare

And the shadows dim most of her stale air

 

But the heart (albeit fickle and stubborn)

Does not see this illusion that hinders love

That life; death are one in the same poem

And not alone; be her below and I above

 

The temple of the soul is only a fleeting figure

By whom the shadows hold an apparition

It is neither death, nor life, nor a conception

Or deception, or a mirror view of a reflection

 

Dark and light freed from perception

Our love meets near the breath of a prayer

Neither eyes wide- nor eyes shut

Death need not end this affair

Reviews

[Kevin Andros]

Wow! Such an inspirational poem! I thought that I found only dark stuff in writerscafe. I found it cute and very warming. How warming and heartening this would be if *Imagines* spoken by a lover to his love!? Death may not end this affair. This is a great title for your poem too! "Death may not end this affair"! I loved this poem. Continue writing. I'm making this poem as my favorate read. Keep writing! ~KA~

[Kara Emily Krantz]

i love the word "albeit" - yes, yes i do.

Love the title, and the way you use the line at the end of the poem. I can see why people have enjoyed this piece - i felt like you ALMOST overdid the rhyming of the "itions" though (apparition, etc) but at the same time I felt that it worked...

it's morbid yet sweet how the narrator is claiming that death need not end an affair... because it many ways death does end an affair, but at the same time, love can linger on. it can more than linger - it can stay just as strong as always. which only means the heart breaks each day.

hugs

[Sarah]

I really like this - very sweet and inspirational. It's true that love can go beyond the grave, and you definitely captured this with your eloquent language. ^_^ I love the line "That life; death are one in the same poem," and the repetition of the title at the beginning and end. Great job! ^_^

[W.k.kortas]

Should it be "elusive" in the sixth line? The return to "Death need not end this affair" is a nice touch. I found the rhyme scheme and the meter a bit problematic. It was difficult for me to see if the rhyme scheme was intentional or happenstance due to the irregularity. Thematically, the piece is very much like a sonnet, and I think it could be more effective if you re-worked into that form.

[Tenten]

this one speaks loud. it touches my soul, beautiful work.

[fdsa]

BREATHTAKING. I hope you are submitting this various places. The Paris Review perhaps? Wholly impressed.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful - and I believe you are right we are still connected from either side. Well expressed and sensationally written. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Cece]

i dont know how i can compete in a contest
with you in this contest too
truly beautiful poem i can never compete
it shows death has no boundaries
like in ghost the love goes with you

[Lauren Burch]

Imaginitive title, to start. I like the allusion towards marraige and the 'till death do us part'. Such a whispering air to it, inspiring at the least. Penned beautifully. Wonderful write.

[Damien Dsoul]

It's got a feeling to it. A pleading tone, and yet the voice is just so smooth and subtle ... it conquesrs my thoughts with heart-rending ease.

[Tania Leigh]

True love reaches beyond the tangible aspects of life......true love remains (no pun intended) with the soul....and a soul never dies.

Excellent write....I enjoyed this very much.