Lifeless

I taste like cobwebs

Of prose that crumbles as

Time laps at the surface

Snowflakes cover skin that was 

Once mine

Finding their way into hollows and valleys

Filled with cloudless nights

Breathless letters tumble from scarlet

Inked onto the most fragile of parchment

Aching with a sense of disappointment

And dismay

The ice protects

What the fire does neglect

But it burns all the same

Reviews

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"The ice protects
What the fire does neglect
But it burns all the same"

True true. I like that a lot.

[kublakhan27]

I was blown away by this piece...the first lines are perfect, as some others have mentioned, and I always love to see winter imagery, being my favourite season...great work :)

[Vikrantsingh]

FireFly.. this one is simply amazing and you made this expressive :)
The word which you use Cobwebs that shows how deeply you felt while narrating this one from pen to paper :)
Read and really felt great thanks for sharing Lori :)

[FireFly]

Thanks for reading me!

[Mike Cole]

This is very descriptive I think that the problem with some of my poetry is that I fail to be vivid and descriptive and I love seeing poets who know how to make me really imagine what I'm reading

[FireFly]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

[Frieda P]

"I taste like cobwebs"...wow, you had me with the first line, to the last verse, imagery was superb, nicely pen'd.

[FireFly]

Thank you so much!

[Frieda P]

Pleasure was mine, you're welcome!

[DJ]

beautifully penned.
"The ice protects
What the fire does neglect
But it burns all the same"
These lines really grabbed me, I love the imagery you used in this. Well done! Thanks Lori for the RR.

[FireFly]

Thank you for stopping by and reading me!

[Kelly Scheppers]

"Breathless letters tumble from scarlet
Inked onto the most fragile of parchment..."

I do believe these two lines are quite lovely and befitting to stand on their own merit! Lovely poem, either way!

My best,
Kelly

[FireFly]

Thanks for reading me! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Trevor Jay Bloodworth]

Elegant. I think that what you managed to accomplish and the emotions that you brought forward with such few lines was very good.

[FireFly]

Thank you so much!

[K. Louis]

I love that first stanza! Nice imagery throughout and great flow.. that last stanza really stops the reader to think..

[FireFly]

Thank you so much! I would love to hear what thoughts the last stanza evoked.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is wonderful, FireFly. Your imagery is amazing.. I really love the opening stanza.. "I taste like cobwebs" that line really grips me! It is dark and invokes death so perfectly. I am sending my friends to have a read..

[FireFly]

Oh my gosh, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!

[Ravyne Hawke]

You are so welcome. I cannot guarantee anyone will come, but I have sent the RR.