First Kiss

My First Kiss

 

Our lips meet with a fiery passion burning,

My thirst being relieved,

My Heart beating fast than it was when you got your first shot(oww:'[ )

My Stomach Started Flopping and Turning,

From this kiss I received,

Almost like when you get your first tricycle as a tot.

 

Passionate but...,

Fierce,

Fierce but...,

My First.

Author's Note

what i want my first kiss to be like:)

Reviews

[Tony]

If you are serious about it being that seriously great, I am sure it will be.
For you will be ever so particular.
You are a smart kid.
Keep up the good work, people are watching you.
I remember my first kiss, way back in the 70s, it was less like a shot, more like lightning.
Thank you for the nice Memory of DawnMarie.

[nostal]

Hmm a bit disjointed

[joshua deathdealer]

This is great. Well written and well expressed. Excellent work.

[Michael Jarrell]

Haha oh man. Make sure it's good! My first kiss was embarassing. =p

Good write!

[reminder]

Keep the emotion and passion of writing!

[Shawn Killian]

I have yet to read something from yours that i like.

Take this: Yet wrote about a simple subject, almost dull and boring. And you made it great to read, and gave it life.

[Crowley]

Yeah...you make me nostalgic for young love...those firsts are so good and so bad and so perfect and so awkward...you cannot replace those experiences, so enjoy them deeply and pack the memories away for a rainy day when you can pull them out and play them back and say ahhhhhhhh.....Great write.

[Deepshikha]

Romance = injections and tricycles? I don't quite understand. (especially the tricycles) Haha, you're the writer though.
I feel like the a/n in parenthesis took away from the poem, also.
But otherwise, it's alright.

[Kes]

Nice one.
My first kiss was... fairly hot and probably way too intimate for... however old i was! Which was far too young, if you ask me. But - whatever - it was fun!
Very nice.
Great write.

[Hopless]

who uve beeen kissin abbie??

[H-Jonesy]

First kisses are usualy the best, depends on what happens afterwards.
But this was cute C: Reminded me of my first kiss, at least the emotions that came with it.
You did a good job here, i shall read more-
Harmony.