I'd  be better off dead

I'd be better off dead

A Poem by Jane Doe

Breaking stuff,

Limp,

Helpless,

All I am is energy mass taking up space.

Hurt,

All cried out,

Stupid,

Dependent,

Cowerdly,

Just another flipping lunatic case.

Unliked,

Unloved,

Unhappy,

Untruthfull,

Unworthey,

Of the support of my friends.

Cause,

Roses are red,

Violets are blue,

I'd be better off dead,

According to you.

© 2009 Jane Doe


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Wow.. someone really moved you emotions through this piece.. how we can feel this way when someone really close hurts us or through rejection of different sorts... you could really feel the pain but almost undertones of throwing it back at them.. in agreement and adding to whatever they may have said or done to cause hurt.. the flow and format shows a sense that you are maybe done with them .. or hey I may be wrong and you may not be done with this friendship(?) and just firing back using emotions! This was really intense to read anyways.. great job.. everyone has times where someone strikes a nerve .. leaving us feeling very vulnerable and raw! If someone said all those things .. that would certainly be terrible!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow.. someone really moved you emotions through this piece.. how we can feel this way when someone really close hurts us or through rejection of different sorts... you could really feel the pain but almost undertones of throwing it back at them.. in agreement and adding to whatever they may have said or done to cause hurt.. the flow and format shows a sense that you are maybe done with them .. or hey I may be wrong and you may not be done with this friendship(?) and just firing back using emotions! This was really intense to read anyways.. great job.. everyone has times where someone strikes a nerve .. leaving us feeling very vulnerable and raw! If someone said all those things .. that would certainly be terrible!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awesome poem!
"Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I'd be better off dead,
According to you. " My favorite part! LOL
The poem was very emotional. Great write =]

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bravo! I can feel ya pain. I have thought the same things at some point in my life. It may be short but it has a lot of meaning to it. Very emotional.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can relate to every single word of this.
And who the hell said that to you? Because I think I just might kill them.

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Added on December 5, 2009

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