I'd be better off dead

Breaking stuff,

Limp,

Helpless,

All I am is energy mass taking up space.

Hurt,

All cried out,

Stupid,

Dependent,

Cowerdly,

Just another flipping lunatic case.

Unliked,

Unloved,

Unhappy,

Untruthfull,

Unworthey,

Of the support of my friends.

Cause,

Roses are red,

Violets are blue,

I'd be better off dead,

According to you.

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. someone really moved you emotions through this piece.. how we can feel this way when someone really close hurts us or through rejection of different sorts... you could really feel the pain but almost undertones of throwing it back at them.. in agreement and adding to whatever they may have said or done to cause hurt.. the flow and format shows a sense that you are maybe done with them .. or hey I may be wrong and you may not be done with this friendship(?) and just firing back using emotions! This was really intense to read anyways.. great job.. everyone has times where someone strikes a nerve .. leaving us feeling very vulnerable and raw! If someone said all those things .. that would certainly be terrible!

[Jordan's Back]

Just another flipping lunatic case.
Unliked,
Unloved,
Unhappy,
Untruthfull,
Unworthey,
Of the support of my friends.

This sounds like me

[nono]

This is amazing. I love the flow of words, it's a fantastic poem. Keep up the gerat work! I look forward to reading more of your writing. But I have to know what prompt this is for?

[Tony]

This is pretty miserable.
Well, I guess we take an inventory of our lives occasionally, and with little surprise we find ourselves lacking. But pretty soon we feel better and were off on our next round of bizarre human behavior.
Great Poem!~

[RAWR!]

hHAHAH
Just another flipping lunatic case.
xD
this was awesome

[*** Hey Jude***]

I love how you incorporated the roses are red, violets are blue. The emotions expressed here are articulate, more than touching, and very relatable. No one has the right to hurt or cause others pain. It shows how small they are my friend! Nice work~ Jude :-)

[J]

Great write :D All the emotion was getting to me.Barva! hehe .

[misha]

There is alot of emotion in this poem. Great write

[Thomas B. Buckman]

This is full of pent up emotions and self-aggression. I know, cause I used to think the same way.
Super intense, I really enjoyed it.
= ] I hope everything goes well for you.

[Closed Account]

girl, this is absolutely AMAZING! I love it, and I can totally relate to it. And, I'm with sharkapillar, whoever the hell said that to you better watch out. :) Great job, gurlie!! :P

[Domo]

Obviously this displays tons of emotion. This poem is no doubt very powerful, good job.
~D♥m♥~