poker face

Its great deal of pain you have caused,

You may now leave unapplaused,

You can die without a word for all i care,

But even then it won't be fair, 

Because now you have lost you pair,

The pair of trust an lust,

You have lost the real poker game though you have the money,

You still a no body to me hunny,

Its great deal of pain you have caused,

You may now leave unapplaused,

You can die without a word for all i care,

But even then the won't be fair.

 

 

Reviews

[Wicahpi]

I'd suggest re-reading this line by line very slowly
to find the edits that must be done here! A few missing letters,
misspellings; but other than that the meaning of the poem is stated well.
What is a good poem could become quite the perfect one.
Good Luck in the Contest!

[Jordan's Back]

You still a no body to me hunny,
Its great deal of pain you have caused,
You may now leave unapplaused,
You can die without a word for all i care,
But even then the won't be fair.

Excellent

[meeee]

that was soooooooooooooooooo awesome u have talent gurl!!!!!!!!
Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[RAWR!]

such a great flow dude, your gonna grow up to be one of those writers.
keep on pushing.

[gimpy]

OMG I loved it (srry i didn't get a chance to read it last night I wish i jad av it's amazing

[Sexy P3nguin]

Wow
I am blown away by you
Your so young but you have such talent.
You should keep up the good work and maybe this will get you somewhere in the future