It doesnt matter/I'd choose you any day

if you take a look

in the night, at the sea

and the waves reflect the stars

know that i guided you there

when you look up

and see that celestial message

leaving you somber, those stars

are mine to chart

when you think of me

and salt water bitter

blackens your mouth

i think about you too

then when that cold sea-breeze

cuts to your bones

remember, you hated gore

unless it was mine

Reviews

[Beren Ongur]

This felt close to “you won’t find cigarettes in the snow”
First and second parts are GOLD! romantic lovely, close to sun
But the rest is more silver, I can taste that bitter salt in my mouth too. I felt every line.
You can do both sweet&bitter in the same poem.
Talent, my friend, talent.