dio dell ' uomo

I tried challenging myself with a conversation piece.

I SOLD MY SOUL

LOVE ME FOR MY BONES

(please?)

i see your voice

you have no gaze

OUT OF LOVE

holy one

born from gods spit

IT IS YOUR IMAGE

YOU SEEK TO DEFILE

a pathetic perversion of will

ripped from others sin 

YOU THINK YOURSELF PURE

i think

Author's Note

This is an excerpt from one of my projects. I would like opinions/pointers, especially for writing conversation. If explanation anywhere is wanted Ill provide

Reviews

[Chris]

Might I suggest you view a certain effort of mine and see if that might help you?

https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Ancient117331/756601/

[Tan-90]

I love this! I am no expert on writing conversation, but your piece spoke to me. Leaving some impressions below.

If look at the piece as a conversation between two voices(within one person) demarcated using capitalisation and otherwise, below is how it came across.

As I read, the words echo in my head in sort of dramatised meek and pleading and mighty and self-important tones.

In the end, the voice who sought acceptance in the first place regains some power and has the other questioning…

I went through many emotions and at the end was overcome with a small sense of victory.