A Liar's Fate

A brief pause

An eternity of silence

Brief thoughts of doubt

The echoing sounds of shattering

Trust

Respect

They fall to the ground

Broken and wasted

Muddled words

Closed off ears

A plea escapes

Forgiveness and regret

Bitter tears flow

As memories of past friendship fades

Author's Note

I would truly appreciate your reviews as well as your CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.

Reviews

[The Dreamer]

"trust and respect fall to the ground broken and wasted" - i liked those lines - it so true. friendship is built on trust - all relationships are, and when you lose that trust and respect everything else crumbles down and nothing remains standing. i see you've been commented on those lines before. :) good one.

[fiery-san]

Thank you for the review dreamer, I had my share of broken friendship but I've got to say, there are some that can actually be fixed but it wouldn't be the same as it was before. ^_^

[The Dreamer]

thats right - how much ever you say you trust that person again , there will always be some doubt remaining.

[Deron Alexis]

very well written many friendships fall prey to lies and deception in truth a repetitive breaker of trust winds up alone very well captured well written well done

[fiery-san]

Thank you Deron. Your words are very much appreciated. ^_^

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. You use the short statements with skill. Making the reason and purpose of the poem strong and clear. I like the flow of thoughts. Each taking the reader to a different place.
"The echoing sounds of shattering
Trust
Respect
They fall to the ground
Broken and wasted"
The above lines were my favorite. When our words become useless. There is nothing left. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[fiery-san]

I'm flattered... I never been told to have such a skill... Thank you for the review, it really means a lot. I'm glad you like it. ^_^

[FocusedAmnesia]

"The echoing sounds of shattering
Trust
Respect
They fall to the ground
Broken and wasted"
- I really, really like this. Short, but powerful in it's emotion-packed words

[fiery-san]

Thank you for the review, it's very much appreciated. I'm glad you like it. ^_^

[Pax]

powerfully spoken.... i say in a profound way its well written taken from the core of the heart... awesome!

[fiery-san]

thanks kababayan, glad you like it! ^_^

[Frieda P]

A solemn message, kind of hits you right between the eyes. Very nicely written.

[fiery-san]

I'm glad that this short poem still manages to make an impression on you. Thank you, Frieda. ^_^

[Rob Santana]

What a strong write. You have an awesome way with words. I especially liked "The echoing sounds of shattering" I love that love good job here fiery-san.

[fiery-san]

Thank you, CREEPER. I'm glad you like it. ^_^

[J. Write]

Brilliant ! I loved the use of meaningful words describing almost and end to life, almost. Well done!

[fiery-san]

Thank you... but just to be sure... are you referring to the poem or my blog post? ^_^

[jamal]

omg that was deep and true!!! keep it up :))

[fiery-san]

Thank you, jamal! ^_^

[Hannah Messer]

I love this. The only thing I would even consider changing is one of the uses of the word "brief," but even that is not necessary, I don't think. But you could use another word like short or fleeting or whatever else you might find, if you didn't want to use it twice.
Either way, this is so sobering. Sitting here, my mind was racing and I was thinking about what to have for lunch, what to wear to my cardiology appointment, and how much I didn't feel like walking the dog. Now, all I can think about is this poem, and dishonesty. It's amazing.

[fiery-san]

Thank you for the both the review and advice. They are very much appreciated. I'm glad you love the poem. ^_^