Funeral Thoughts

Funeral Thoughts

A Poem by Luna Evangeline

It’s a funny thing,

the feeling after someone has died.

 

It’s a peculiar emptiness,

a hole that is first filled to the brim with doubt

and later just drained into

nothing.

 

Everything is hollow,

echoing,

and cold.

So cold.

 

It used to feel like

happiness reached up through my heart and

pulled my lips into a smile.

Now it’s just muscles moving over teeth

to appease everyone.

 

When I first realized she was gone

funny emotions came smashing together in my chest

like one million tiny explosions

angryconfusedanguishedeverythinginbetween

and now there’s nothing left

nothing but me

just me.

 

© 2013 Luna Evangeline


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I love the line that the words run into each other. It really keeps with the feeling of numbness. After the death of a loved one, life is all jumbled up. I am sorry for your loss. Write to release, release to write...

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Much appreciated. I'm grateful for your kind thoughts.
Sleep the eternal and drift into black, till you look around and find the empty shadows ;)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Poetic even in the reviews.... Brava!
It used to feel like
happiness reached up through my heart and
pulled my lips into a smile.
Now it’s just muscles moving over teeth
to appease everyone.
Stellar.
Even when we see the inevitable cessation of another's life coming there is nothing that prepares us for the deluge. It is truly like watching the tide pull out before the surge - and the black water just keeps encroaching - with the steady ferocity of sharks in full feeding frenzy - everything is skeletonized, and there is nothing we can do. I lost my dad May 10, 2009. As you displayed so well in this poem - every emotion I ever had collides in my head without warning at times. This is a powerful poem. Very powerful.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Thank you, TL. You're a recommended reviewer. I appreciate the thoughts.
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TLK
You slide us past general abstractions -- yeah, yeah, the reader thinks, bereavement whatevs -- but the (literally) visceral dive into the heart's power to control the smile turns this poem into the slick operation of a meat-puppet hurt by circumstance.

Your use of the run-on words to indicate the proximity of those explosions, located in that chest, gives the image of a ragdoll bursting with pain from the inside even as society makes them lie.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

You're poetic even outside of your poetry. *applause*
TLK

11 Years Ago

I can't bloody help myself sometimes.
Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

We all know the feeling.
I really like this. The description of emptiness is beautifully written, well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Thank you.
This piece captured beautifully and truthfully the emotions or the numbness of emotions of someone who just lost a loved one. Second stanza says it all. Very well-penned.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Thank you.

Well written, I really liked the mash of words with no breaks between, it's like everything running at once with no relief.
Brilliant.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, I appreciate your thoughts.
Excellent read and write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
I agree. Loss or death can give off those cryptic responses that so often mimics
sentimental divergency. And this is true because of the many human levels of
remorse. You're fourth stanza was a poem in itself in it's discription of the most
intricate postmortem relationship or activity.

nicely written.
dana


Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Thank you Dana.
I love it. The portrayal of love and melancholy is beautifully written. The line angryconfusedanguishedeverythinginbetween shows the maelstrom of thought during such a horrible time. Well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

11 Years Ago

Thanks Elliott, much appreciated.

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