Out growing Atrophy

A strange poem about out growing what hurts you. A very surrealistic figurative style of mine.

 

Breathe

 

Breathe

 

Breathe

 

Strange animal curled

Pale skin glowing in

Dim light

 

Newborn birthed under a halo of thorns

Dirt littering your swollen mouth

 

Neck pivoting

Searching for food

Drawing insects

Into your warm sweet mouth

 

Slowly sustained

On the lowely crumbs that

crawled into your trap

Weak creature growing

Bigger

 

Thorn halo getting closer

Supple skin

 

Emaciated appendages

Curling tighter

Feral eyes growing wider

 

Breathe

 

Breathe

 

Breathe

 

Black thorns swallow her tender skin

Womb harshly closing down on its fetus

Starved child screaming

Shrill, acrid, raw

 

Shaking the air with

Intensity

 

Bright red swollen fruit

Strung like glowing candy on the

Branches of a overhanging tree

 

Falls downs,

Caught in the ebony briars

Liquid candy seeping

Onto the razor thorns

 

Her arms clawing through her barrier

Flesh torn, ravaged,

Breaking through,

Blood swelling like liquid candy

 

She stands victorious,

Skin hanging in ribbons,

Mouth sticky with sweet fruit

 

Breathe

 

Breathe

 

Breathe

Reviews

[A. Amos]

A graceful and eloquent write, Bravo,

[TL Boehm]

one word. FORMIDABLE. intense, dark, graphic, chilling. it made me shudder. Well done!

[ace]

amazing how some cosmetic changes can make a work sooo much better i have absolutely nothing negative to say bout this anymore :D absolutely excellent work

[ace]

interesting and well written the only real negative thing i can say is that the font could be larger so it would be easier to read and you could add a picture to draw more attention to it so more people read it