I will finally say...

Out with it!

I will finally say...

I was obsessed with you

Every day, more and more it grew.

I was just so impressed with you.

You made me feel blessed and of the best with you.

My spirit and soul, it bonded in you,

and in me this person that you did renew,

you lifted me up when I was blue

you were my happy pill and more than a few.

Everything you said was true.

Never did you lie and nothing I did was a distress to you.

Your words are soft and kind, you always knew.

When times were hard we made it through.

Now you are gone and just a virtue

I messed things up and now I miss you

My heart was alone and called out to you

at night you would do what you do.

I even kept death away from you

and in lieu as you lie ill dying I bought angels to you.

I prayed with them for you

I asked Him and He healed the whole of you.

I gave this new life to you.

I will take what I have learned from you.

Much will be done and till the end you'll remember who

was the one who made this light in you, as it grew.

I had to settle my obsession for you

so I left you.

I so loved you.

It was the best for you.

I wish this was something that I could redo.

It would be better to you.

But I am not the one for you,

and this, you always knew.

Author's Note

To Ariann

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Dearest Elijah,

This is one of the most honest and heartbreaking writes I have read...your words have stunned me...
Your expression of gratitude, loss, regret, and pure love, is genuinely conveyed...

I cannot tell you how much I admire your display of affection... deeply felt, to the core...

Profoundly expressed...

This belongs in my library... for engaging me, with all heart.~xoxo~

[ferousfinite]

I am complicated =). THanks you so much! That is THE NICEST thing ANYONE has ever sad to me ^_^

[Robbie~xoxo~]

LIFE is complicated...I see the beauty in your flaws...it's something to value, Elijah...~xoxo~

[ferousfinite]

Affirmations. I aspire to be a great writer while I am building my career in engineering.
read moreAffirmations. I aspire to be a great writer while I am building my career in engineering.

"My writing is more than 2D in my mind and a complete piece of writing is on the page already I simply discover what is says."

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Ambition flows through your veins... that's liquid fire...hold on to that... xx

[ferousfinite]

That's the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me! =D

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The rhyme scheme was a bit much...
but consistent throughout this verse...
I say this would be better just free-verse...
IMPO...get the impact of the write...
lets the words flow-out...and feel the depth...

[ferousfinite]

Schemes are less important to the entire format in my opinion. 99% of my writing IS infact improv. I set the stage in my mind, execute the style I need to use, then write. I do not disagree with your statement at all. The scheme is a bit much yes but this piece merits extreme and deliverance. The depth would not exist without stressing the reader with this scheme. =)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This is your style...
as I read more into your work...
I see the design for its intended purpose ---
there is a method to each writer...

[MsJewel]

This is one of those poems that just curls right up in my heart. I could feel the longing in your words my friend. A gorgeous, heartfelt piece.

:) Julie

[ferousfinite]

Yea I miss her. She still sends me an email letting me know she is still there...

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱
Very heartfelt sentiments, Elijah. Here is hoping you get back together with Ariann. Hang in there. :)

[ferousfinite]

That would be great! thanks

[ferousfinite]

In this piece I illustrate what it is like to break away from the only love that You have ever truly known. I believe my life was changed forever, and even still I get a bit choked up when I read this.

From the first and second person: aaaa double quatrain.

[ferousfinite]

... I have directed the readers attention to not me, but her, and what the verb here has defected to.

[ferousfinite]

Cape diem mi je t'aime! xo