Untilted.

 

 

It seems like the journey of romance has ceased

Forgotten persistence devoured by sorrow

Its tears gone with the morning breeze

Time's insignificant and so are its hours

 

Such moon embraced by silhouette

Shadows dance and caress dim light

There are times when even elephants forgett

That for every bright day there's an embracive night

 

As faith flirts with doubt so friendly

And smiles fade within the dread

Hope diminshes so recessively

That its heart sweet talks to the dead

 

A passionate kiss between skin and blade

Draws the story of concealed love

And as its color drips the unveiled pain

Tears become blood

 

Melancholy melody wandering with the wind

Mingles around a mangled soul

Malignity within the most luscious dreams

Meek heartache beating to the direst toll

 

Burry burdens under patience that bares

Let this be yet but another start

There shall be so many faces that I will wear

Until I find the one that soothes the heart..

Reviews

[Tori]

Gorgeous poem. I agree with Bhavana, that line has loads of potential and i think you could really do something beautiful with it. But everything else is written exquisitely; I can feel the emotion, the pain, and the word choice is astounding. Great job with this! :)

[CircusNerd]

i love the word choice here, but I think it would flow better if you added some more detail to this line:
tears become blood
there are so many adjectives that gracefully shroud the subjects in an intoxicating ambiguity, but I feel this line is...well....bland.
fantastic piece :D