Shattered Wishing Star

Star light, star bright,

The first star I see tonight;

I wish I may, I wish I might,

Have the wish I wish tonight

 

Star light, Star bright,
Why have you failed me tonight

I wished with all my might

Begging for this wish tonight.

 

My innocence has washed away

The childish wonder

has lost its luster

fading into the dark night sky

 

Reality has kicked in

Time to grow up

Can't be the next peter pan

Can't live among the stars any longer.

 

Children are believing no more

Faries, mermaids, and all the glamour.

Pirates, Treaure, Damsels in destress,

children are forgetting, turning their backs

 

Those wishing stars have shattered

Falling to Earth like meteors.

Their twinkle has fizzeled out

Their magic blowing away in space.

 

 

 

Author's Note

This took me almost a week to write. I wanted it to be perfect and be packed with alot of emotions in it. I am so Proud of this Poem What do you guys think???

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

Wow, I am sorry this took me so long to get to Fenix, it really was a beautiful work of art. I love how you took not only an old nursery rhyme, but also the idea of Peter Pan, and weaved both of them into a loss of child's innocence. I think this is something that most people can relate to. It is no fun growing up and being thrust into the cold arms of reality's embrace. I would love to see more like this from you, interweaving nursery rhymes and fairy tales. You could make a series if you so chose. Really magical work here dear. Don't lose faith though. Just clapping can save a fairy's life after all. =) We do believe in fairies!

[Fenix Flight]

Hmmm That gives me an Idea.... Thank yo.. I Might just start like a poetry book of stuff like this.. :-D

[Fenix Flight]

Thanks for the idea!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Ashira Macy]

My pleasure dear, it was really a joy to read!

[Fenix Flight]

Thank you! It took me so long to write this and I am so proud of it ^-^

[B.J]

Such brilliant art work to be proud off. Perfection at a tip of a pen so to speak. Great work. I hope you write for the rest of your life.

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I see how you could be proud of a piece like this, it really stands out and I love the way you worded it. I love the realism and how as honest as it is there is still a sense of beauty here. Great job with your flow and style choice.

[Fenix Flight]

Thank you So much ^-^

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. A realistic view on life and things. It is sad when we forget to dream and think about fantasy and myth. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Boranus]

magic never wears out. it endures for all eternity. it is the only reality. all else is fraught and fury. now come to dungeon and kneel. in your humble humility, your every wish will be granted, one night with a god.

[ron]

First of all...
Faries, mermaids, and all the glamour.
Pirates, Treaure, Damsels in destress.

These are all real. Do not give up on them Fenix.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW, this poem is very creative. Love the work, I enjoyed reading this piece, nicely penned. :-)

Kaze~

[Fenix Flight]

Thank you soooo much ^-^!!!!!!!!

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome, it was my pleasure to read this creative peice. :-D

[Hawk Flight]

Wow. this is really neat.. Its like the person has sadly accepted the fact that those things are not real and they have to move on... Jeesh its really good sis. Keep it up!!!!!!

[Fenix Flight]

thanks big brother *hugs*

[Matching Socks]

This is so beautifully done Fenix, touch of melancholy in your words.
It's a sad coming of age moment when we realize exactly what life is all about, and that it is not perfect.
Well darlin'.

[Matching Socks]

That should say well done... :D

[Fenix Flight]

Thank you so much ^-^ It be honest this poem took me SOOOO long to write almost a week. I wanted to get it just right

[Matching Socks]

:-) you did a great job, I love the concept, it's unique.