Firelight

Firelight

A Poem by Fenix Flight
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Fire

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I stare into the blazing flames
Dancing their erotic dance
Crackling
snapping
burning
It puts me in a trance

© 2014 Fenix Flight


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Little Firebug. I'm surprised that wasnt your nickname within our group

Posted 10 Years Ago


Fenix Flight

10 Years Ago

Mwahahaa I ish a firebug *blaze Blaze Blaze*
Not much to say here in terms of correction. Only thing I would say is that it might be better to change 'it puts' to 'putting', and perhaps 'I stare' to 'Staring'. Also note that 'snapping' and 'burning' aren't in capitals and there is no punctuation, although that might be planned.
I can definitely relate to this poem, well maybe apart from the erotic bit, the rhythm is good. The word erotic and trance gives an image of, at least for me, love making by the fireplace, although coming from a male perspective, we rarely have time to look at anything but the you-know-whats.
I like the lengths of these poems, it's something I'm not able to do very well, but I do enjoy these little tidbits of poetry. Good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Oooo sensually erotic in an almost pagan dance in the middle of the woods kind of way :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Fenix Flight
Fenix Flight

Kingdom Of Amythest, ME



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Please Call me Fenix (Fen-nicks) (The FEN is pronouced the same way you would pronouce the FEN in Fenway) its more my name then the one I was given at birth. I wont put my life story here. You will se.. more..

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