Paradise Lost

Pondering life..

from this bridge,

watching the world go by

beneath the skeletal arms 

of November trees,

i ask myself, do trees dream?

or have their dreams, in time,

sickened like mine, into a deep 

narcotic sleep, sap slumberous and thickened,

 ... existence bleak?

the city sparkles in the distance ...

a promising party i'm not invited to

above, the sky is pervading ...dusky 

... powder coated 

settling into a cold steel blue

dove grey clouds gather to surround

 a rising and indifferent moon

scattered wings of broken promises 

filling up the gloom

i weigh my options

weighing out the cost

pondering a future

when paradise is lost

Reviews

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

impressive introduction and well structured

[felioness]

thanks for the read and critique. I was honoured!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

This is yet another stunning poem with a very beautiful picture at the start. We really feel the paradise lost at times. Ah have you read The paradise lost by John Milton??

[felioness]

Hi I somehow missed your review, which is a shame because it was very encouraging. Thank you, and yes I have read it!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

It's okay friend. Good to see your reply. Your most welcome :)

[Joey Calvo]

Hi! I read your poem Paradis Lost and reallyloved it. If you wouldn't mind, I would love to feature your poem in my short film me and my friend are creating. I will of course credit you in the credits of the film (idk if you would prefer me to credit your real name or your username, just lmk). Just let me know if you woud be interested. Thank you!

[felioness]

I would be honoured! You absolutely can use my poem. Thanks so much for your kind words...very appreciated!

[felioness]

Oh yes! My real name is Sheri Twila Lowe. Again ...honoured you liked my write Paradise Lost and want to use it!

[Joey Calvo]

Thank you so much! This short film is going to be a story based around my new album Red Handed so if you're curious, you can take a listen here: https://soundcloud.com/jocalvo092800 thanks again for the poem!

[wordman]

paradise lost,lord i wonder how many people could relate to this great write !

[felioness]

thank you for the read and kudos!

[wordman]

you`re welcome