the dead in me

a ghostly Louisiana tale

the western sky never looked so black

southern skies but a long lost dream

she was the wind i rode into hell

flying hard on gossamer wings

sorrow never suffered such a lashing

cat' o nine tails raining down on me

swamp gas lit a descending passage 

beckoned by my cajun queen

her pa was waiting deep in them black gums

i never saw him step out from them trees

before i knew it the ride was over

cause her daddy's gun put the dead in me

now i ride in total blackness

forever searching in the cool night breeze

two wheels ride this road forever

seeking passage to my cajun queen 

Author's Note

Cajuns ( /ˈkeɪdʒən/; French: les Cadiens or les Acadiens, [le kadjɛ̃, lez‿akadjɛ̃]) are an ethnic group mainly living in the U.S. state of Louisiana

Reviews

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

this one killed me... I like it to the core

[felioness]

I am so pleased you liked it! It is one of my favourite too. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment that inspired.

[WillaDanvers]

I love the vibe this poem oozes. A beautiful haunting story written within the bounds of a talent filled poem. Very cleverly written :)

[felioness]

Thanks so much for your review. It made me feel GREAT!

[Poems]

You write very well. This has the quality of southern fiction that is haunting. I like little stories told within a poem and I can see the road--dark, limitless and gloomy, as well as the speaker, searching forever for what will never be.

[felioness]

Thank you very much! I love haunting little stories too and I am thrilled that you got the vibe I was going for!

[Poems]

Your welcome.

[Eagle Cruagh]

"She was the wind I rode into hell"
The story of a bike rider who is dead
by her Pappy`s gun.
You just fall out of one character and
fall into another. It is hard to keep up
with such a versatile writer.
Another fantastic story.

Thank you ,
----- Eagle Cruagh

[felioness]

What a wonderful review!!! My head is swelling like a big balloon. Thank you!

[Eagle Cruagh]

You are just an incredible writer.
Accept it. I am not hitting on you. I am just admiring the hell
out of your ability .

[afra]

wow i love it ...great write

[felioness]

Thank you!!