Rolling Stone

"A rolling stone gathers no moss, but it does obtain a certain polish."

 

Rolling Stone

 

.

 

 

I don’t tend to stay

In fact

I often run away

 

Can’t stand to be

In one place

For more

Than a year

But sometimes

Less than a week

 

I roll and roll

I don’t

Leave a great wake

Friends

Are something

I don’t accumulate

 

Sometimes I try

To slow myself down

And reach out

To communicate

But I never can

Drop roots to stay

 

 

The feelings inside

Fumble and tumble

Sometimes they’re up

Those are the times that

 

I love

  I’m happy

I laugh

  I try

I’m wondrous

I encourage

I help

   I’m joyful

   I care

I live

    I’m overfilled with compassion

 

Then,

There’s other times

Most times

When they’re down

These are times that

 

I’m angry

I hate

I’m depressed

   I’m terrified

   I cry

I’m unworthy

   I’m empty

I hide

   I’m lonely

I’m lazy

   Apathy consumes me inside

 

Reviews

[hi]

ok these poems are really good

[JC]

another lyrical poem from you, this one gives me Guthrie, Dylan, Ramblin' feelings, and especially Guthrie for that added madness the ones who can't stay still seem to have...I'm right there with ya on this one, I can't stop movin either, sometimes it creates moments of pure joy other times it's so damn hard...but worth it I think...enjoyed the read my hobo-ing friend.

[Cyndy Robinson]

A really expressive piece of writing in just a few words. I really love the quote about the rolling stone, it ties everything in so neatly. I find I have roots, and more often than not I wish I did not. Maybe you are rooted to your freedom. A thought provoking piece, well written. And I like the artistic style of stanza 6 and 8.

[747]

It is not perfect, much like me, but it is the way I am. I think you may be onto something there... "rooted to my freedom" ... Yes I rather think so.

I am glad to have made you think, and am happy to see you enjoyed the experimental style.

[Cyndy Robinson]

As you pointed out....perfection is overrated. If everyone was, there would be nothing left to write about, lol.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there two sides to every story, and usually two sides to every person.

you express both sides very nicely here. Kind of a "here i am, the way i am, take me or leave me."

j.

[747]

That's a very accurate assessment.

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.

[Stefano Segnan]

Greetings! The overall image is animated and the poem is easy to read, which is marvelous. Do you write in free verse only? And does free verse feel as the only natural way of writing? If the answer to those questions is yes, then you can ignore the fallowing advice: you could experiment with other forms, especially rhythmic ones (not to confuse with rhyme) to attain more musicality in the poem.
Just keep writing, good work.

[747]

No, most of my work is rhythmic. I purposely went for more of a free verse approach here.
read moreNo, most of my work is rhythmic. I purposely went for more of a free verse approach here.

Thank you for your read & review.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Torn roots build no lives.
One of these days, you're going to have to stand your ground.
An honest, well articulated piece of work.
Fascinating read!

[747]

This is true. One day I will stay. That day is still a ways away though.

Thank you for reading and taking the time to review.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Those mood fluxes follow us through life, but as you say about the rolling stone, they get more polished. I like the way you have arranged your poem in short lines making it look long A bit like Life really. Well done for writing it.

[747]

Indeed. Thank you for reading and leaving a note.