Out To Sea

This poem was inspired by a painting my twin sister had done.

A vast blue ocean before her stands
A wave of emotions flow down to the sand
Each drop a fear, a laugh, a cry
A time to wish them each goodbye
A cleansing - now she feels released
Her heartache gone, her pain, her grief
The tide comes in and hits the cliffs
Like the tide, her heart now will shift
Strong and true her heart will be
As she sends her past out with the sea.

 

 

Reviews

[Arthur Henn]

She sprays her emotions
of an open sea
upon the deck
of her flowing winds.

Blue skies, looking down
on her with the seagulls eye.

She walks barefoot
amongst the sands
sands of life
that will wash back out to sea.

She smiles looking into the rays of sun
the warmth of love, grows beneath her soul
looking for the one she loves.
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A great poem you have here.

[GTVile]

I like the reference to the tide. I think most people emotionally decompress at the beach (I think it would be hard not to) and the analogy is perfect here. The ocean is like a proof that time is endless, and that we're kind of all cogs in a big machine of reality. It's amazing to think that when we stand there on the beach, we are gazing upon the same sea that all of our forebearers did for the last thousands of thousands of years. You did a good job of taking it as a means of healing here.

[Dezaraye]

I love this piece. I love the idea of all of the bad going out with the tide. What a beautiful way to let go. Even if you can't really be there, it's easy to visualize reading these words. This is definitely a piece for my favorites!

[Marie]

Beautiful.

[James Writes Things]

Nice write. It has a good flow to it...

Mmmmm.

[Kathy07]

I LOVE THIS! I love the ocean and I love how you send your sorrows out with the tide.
Crying like the salt water is very healing! Great analogy! This is a favorite!

[Eagle Cruagh]

I started with the oldest poem you show and hope
to work up to the present.
This is a refreshing and energizing writing, it sounds
like you washed all the guilt, confusion and regret
out with the tide. Some of it always comes crashing
back to haunt us of course, but for the most part it
was a great catharsis, like a rebirth.
Great poem! It will be featured in THE STREAM.
----- Eagle Cruagh

[Melody P-]

another beautiful write! my compliments*

[TL Boehm]

Yes, I agree, this is a lovely one and I am so happy to see you here at the Cafe. There are wonderful people here. Peace.

[Emily B]

and you were worried about sharing your poems. This came to me in a read request. How exciting is that!

This is lovely. Beautiful. It says so much is such a flowing way.