One-sided letter

hello!
This is your depression speaking. Did you miss me?
did you forget you carry me around?
that i sit in your mind, & how easily i take control?
did you forget he cared more about her?
no, of course you didnt.
just like you didnt forget we're all truly alone.
how about how decent human beings are?
oh wait, they'll never care as much as you do.
do you remember what being alive felt like?
cause you havnt been pushing as hard as you could.
sure, theres an aweful lot of beauty in the world. But you'll have to look past me to find it first.
oh. are you still trying to fight me?
aha, you can try.
but you seem to forget you dont notice when i creep in until its to late.
so why dont you be brave, for once,
& do something for yourself?

Author's Note

old. am more positive now :D

Reviews

[Titan]

You have spotlighted depression in a very interesting way. It's almost menacing, yet still manages to pull of a "kind" air. Good job with this.

[Ms. Gruye]

you raise some very important questions. I would like to hear more of your answers

[c.m.]

I like it a lot. You made depression into a living thing and it was an awesome read. Nice job.

[The Analog Kid]

You gave depression a character here. Real universal ideas here. Everyone has known these feelings from time to time. Depression lurks just below the surface.

Patrick

[R J Askew]

I like it. Your depression sounds like interesting company, quite a card. maybe the way is not to fight against such forces, to engage them in in some way and defuse their hostility. But I am psycho-babbling. Another way might be to knife said depression and bury it in concrete. But that might provoke a haunting. Ach! Maybe, capture the depression and put it to useful work. I think such is in us all to a g/l extent. And comes and goes to a g/l extent.

[Jessica]

great words, I can totally relate to this too. Great write :)

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a great way to write a poem. I love the letter format. this is a unique approach. The flow is easy to read. I know I have felt like this a time or too. I did find a few little errors and have listed them below.

I in the third line should be capitalized

In the tenth line you need an apostrophe added in the word haven't

in the 14th line you need to capitalize I am put an apostrophe in the word didn't

[Bette]

i really like this i like the fact that you gave depression a voice, well done!

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

I really like this. I remember reading it on your fb and I found it intriguing.
Keep writing girly!

-Elissa :)

p.s; "somewhere in between using you for sex & being your best friend i fell in love with you ". I think I know where that came from. &you should totally incorporate that into a write. It's beautiful.