Sundown

Do you feel the sun going down?
Standing at the window of our room
And being miles and miles away from me;
Watching the night crawl upon us all

I feel like the paper on your table;
Slightly yellow and dusty lying there
It's always here just like I am for you;
Ignored for the longest part of night

The look on your pretty face is timid.
Like you think about everything at once
Nothing on your mind has any importance;
Just fragments of your wasted life

My feet are dragging me towards you.
You're still glancing out of the dirty glass
The sight is the same since forever and more;
Only ruins of former lives lived long ago

You don't turn around as I reach you.
Just keep looking at the remains of peace
My arms wrapped around your waist and still;
I want to feel you so much closer

Warm is the touch of your golden skin.
Pulsing life rushing beneath my cold hands
And while you slowly entwine our fingers you say;
Do you feel the sun going down?

Author's Note

thank you so much for taking time to read this. And a very special thank you to all of you who also took the time to leave a comment. <3

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

You don't turn around as I reach you.
Just keep looking at the remains of peace
My arms sneak around your waist and still;
I want to feel you so much closer

I could of highlighted the whole poem. This was wonderful. I enjoyed the beauty and the quietness of this piece. I felt peaceful and I took a deep breath with release of stress. I look forward to coming back to read more of your wonderful writes. I plan on sharing this piece with others.

[Adeline]

This is an awesome poem! I really like it and can feel the emotion coming from it. Nice write! :)

[J.Black]

"Warm is the touch of your golden skin.
Pulsing life rushing beneath my cold hands
And while you slowly entwine our fingers you say;
Do you feel the sun going down?"

This is absolutely beautiful. They way you have chosen words to enhance your writing really made it glow bright. I can relate to this in so many ways and I like when I can relate to an author's feelings, it shows I'm not alone. Thanks for requesting this one, it was indeed a wonderful choice.

[Mike Poe Potter Cot]

This is my favorite out of all your work. Its something that i related to in a indirect way like. It was an enjoyable read.

[37mm]

a gorgeous piece. I can relate to this so well, even though I'm still waiting for my happy end. ;)

[Wildecat]

This is superb writing, totally enjoyed this piece.

[Ian]

I feel like the paper on your table;
Slightly yellow and dusty lying there
It's always here just like I am for you;
Ignored for the longest part of night

I liked that part a lot, I feel identified with it...
It's really good! =)

[Orlando Murcia]

" Warm is your touch of your Golden skin "

I loved this piece
it reminds me of a couple holding
eachother during a glorious afternoon

I really enjoyed this

Great work!

Orlando M