Trust

Trust

A Poem by Olita Tupou

T ime spent build bond, beautiful and strong
R elationships, warm, alive and endless,
U nited, untamed, untouchable, until
S elfish ambitions if not handle with care
T orn trust, precious, priceless and dead, into pieces

© 2023 Olita Tupou


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lovely poem Olita. Carefully constructed and right on point.

If i could make one small critique though. With a title like Trust, you should really consider trusting your readers to pick up on the acrostic construction of each line being part of the puzzle. Rather than separating the intial letter from its rightful place at the front of its word, attach them. Trust your readers, you'll see them are very astute readers who will catch your clever design, and love you all the more for trusting them to find it.

Just my thought.

Love the work
and thanks for the friend invite.

Ken

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Olita Tupou

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your important crtique i welcome it and the impor3 message to trust the readers very impo.. read more



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This is a beautiful poem with staring characters reading trust and describing. Good work 👍

Posted 1 Year Ago


really nice acrostic here...and the last line, so powerful.
But I do agree with Ken...readers will pick up on it...a little too "in your face" with the capitals separated like this.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


lovely poem Olita. Carefully constructed and right on point.

If i could make one small critique though. With a title like Trust, you should really consider trusting your readers to pick up on the acrostic construction of each line being part of the puzzle. Rather than separating the intial letter from its rightful place at the front of its word, attach them. Trust your readers, you'll see them are very astute readers who will catch your clever design, and love you all the more for trusting them to find it.

Just my thought.

Love the work
and thanks for the friend invite.

Ken

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Olita Tupou

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your important crtique i welcome it and the impor3 message to trust the readers very impo.. read more
wow .. powerful .. has a depth of empathy and knowledge only gained by experiencing life .. where would we be if not for trust .. nice piece Olita .. in my opinion
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A nice acrostic piece here. Indeed, trust is wonderful, but it is also fragile.

Posted 1 Year Ago



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Added on August 5, 2023
Last Updated on August 5, 2023
Tags: love, humor, friendship, genre, teen

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Olita Tupou
Olita Tupou

Nuku'alofa, Pacific , Tonga



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