A portrait in progress

Just be alive for once,

And see what have I done.

To deserve this profession of painting!

You have been my muse,

Everytime I would try applying the customary paint

In careful,regular strokes.

For a masterpiece like you.

I didn't have to think that much.

Your features made their own way,

Or perhaps conspired with my naive hands.

I am not a good player,after all.

If I could just give you some life

Every notion of art would breathe in an air of satisfaction,

If I could just kiss you once,

Keeping aside that elaborate hero-worship

And neglecting the standards of a Byronic hero,

I would do that,gladly.

As your true fan.

For me,only this empirical love would satiate the inexplicable thirst,

And I am so very absorbed

That the portrait in progress

Seems to be existent and real

Author's Note

thanks for reading

Reviews

[Latifa]

it's very rare that a love poem catches my attention, as they very often fall into the trap of cliché verses but yours is the contrary, simple yet deep.
I truely enjoyed reading it :), my favorite lines are :
Your features made their own way,
Or perhaps conspired with my naive hands.

[fattycbreezy52]

Latifa, you seem to have the same views like me on the poems falling under the category of clichéd verse.So true.I am glad I could bring that change.Thanks a lot and that quotation is personally my favourite,too:)

[marcus]

Excellent!! I really liked that!!

[fattycbreezy52]

Thanks a lot;)

[Sudeep Mishra]

Nice way to weigh a paint brush against a pen and an artistry against love.

[fattycbreezy52]

In the end, art only wins; ) Thanks for an amazing review! :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Loving someone often leads to artistic metaphors as we search for ways to say adoration. Poets often use art as their medium to 'paint' upon life's canvas their interpretation built in the pigment of colourful words. This you capture and express well.

[fattycbreezy52]

Woww such a lovely expression and interpretation. Thanks John:)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Lovely. One interpretation could be that you wish to describe a person you love, or one that you could love. Another one would be that you wish to describe how you feel. But i just go with the flow of this poem. :)

[fattycbreezy52]

Haha . Thanks for your probe into my poem. It's simply describing the lover in terms of art and focuses more on art than the person taken into consideration. So yes, your second interpretation becomes quite acceptable there . Thanks a lot:).

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome :)

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Like the painting, your words come to life from the page. Love your use of language in this and the prose feel of flow in your lines. The conspiring of the features of his face and the artist's hands is a beautiful image... we all wish to be able to paint like this; to paint that which becomes reality...art imitates life and life springs from art in this piece, FCB. I am a fan of your work... well-done!

[fattycbreezy52]

And i am a fan of your reviews.Thanks dear FT:)