Bed sheet

                                

I unfolded your parts and laid you bare,

Like unfolding the peels of an orange

To reach the profitable pulp inside.

Spreading my organs upon your surface 

I gave myself the merriment of being on a land pristine,

Indented by those adamantine chains

I can't get up!

You are a baldachin,covering my existence like a marquee.

You are the cure against that nausea, against that dizziness

You are a great protection against any motion sickness.

The white in you indemnifies every sin I commit,

Every fantasy I stumble upon! 

Yet, you are stained

By the imprints of the mortal flesh left behind.

Author's Note

thanks for reading pals:)

Reviews

[Captain Rilen]

Interesting to read yet I feel I've missed something. To me it reads of discovering a person, all the fantastic things about them and falling in love, only to realise that they are mortal. How was it intended to be taken?

[fattycbreezy52]

It is more about the person than the sheet.Yes,you are right and got me in.... till the line"they are mortal".Ofcourse,they are very much mortal,buddy.It's only the feeling which is heavenly.Never mind,everyone has their own way of looking into something.I appreciate your own,unique style of looking into my poem.Thanks:)

[Einstein Noodle]

visceral .. dynamic .. very clever use of the metaphor ... love your use of language as well .. thank you for my new word baldachin ... it brings with it a grand historical element to your poem ... and i watch as the speaker peals back those coverlets ... they smell of the out of doors ..having dried outside on the line .. slipping in between ... so cool to the touch on skin .. and after a night ... oh what nights of fantasy and dreams one might have had .. who would want to get up ;) i love this poem for many reasons .. the more i experience it the more i like it .. well done .. very smart!
E.

[fattycbreezy52]

Thanks a lot and I am glad for evoking a lot of feelings, emotions and memories through this poem:)
Thanks a lot!:)

[ANTO]

This is so novel. The life and times of a beloved bed sheet - tells us so much about the bed-sheet user in a witty - bordering on the erotic in the same way that Russia borders on its neighbours. Love that word Baldachin - I actually thought it was when two bearded men stood side by side for comparison and the least hairiest face was announced as the baldachin of the two. ..No...? Okay I'll get my coat.

Well penned my friend. :)

[fattycbreezy52]

Love the comparison with Russian boundary and what a joke on Baldachin!
I mean your imagination can run anywhere and upon anything on this earth or may be beyond the universe and blah blah . Thanks for an amazing review; )

[ron]

Very poetic. I love how you took the reader to you most intimate feelings.

[fattycbreezy52]

Haha . Thanks buddy. Glad I could do that (:

[ron]

Your welcome :)

[andrew mitchell]

So very cleverly written and expressed so well in depth!:):) A fav of yours

[fattycbreezy52]

Thanks a lot for such precious words:)Yes,my favourite:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is the best offering I have read from you thus far. It has so much flair and depth and is wonderfully constructed in an academic verse. It has a distinctive voice. Lovely.

[fattycbreezy52]

means a lot to me.Thank you so much:)