Death

Count things the way it kills you,irrespective of any sort of order or chronology

Mastering the art but not attaining any sort of perfection!
This is quite an oxymoron.
Things once perfect have fallen apart.
Like the shards of glass flying all around as minuscule sylphs, guarding every inch of the cloth against any possible attack.

The jar is full, to the brim, entirely with the knowledge of this mundane world.
Only death needs to be contemplated deeply.
How is life after death?
How is love in that life?
Questions erase the remaining memory and propagate a situation of being seized upon at midnight.
Deep sleep is the replica of death, they say
What if the mouth remains open serving as an outlet for those bloodsucking mosquitoes to come and go.
The floor of the tongue and the cavities around would serve as a beautiful picnic spot.

Plucking all the leaves from a real tree and adorning my materialistic house with a plant which is just my own creation
Where lies the originality?

Playing with a 20 bucks knife and experiencing a deep, excruciating cut.
A cut which may leave behind a scar for a lifetime.
How will this justify those notes which I paid to bring home such a simple slaughtering machine?

Fully flawed, yet laughing on their follies and idiosyncrasies.
How to mute yourself from expressing their vices?
They write welcome on every house mats
Yet, no one opens the door of the heart.

People smile at each other but there is still a narcissistic smile in front of that stupid mirror.
ALAS! This is the only real smile.

I do not see any children playing with those crumpled water boats
All around we have the real boats, enticing every inch of their attraction .
They are yet to know the meaning of someone called the "captain".

A juggler still waits for a boodle to exhibit his ready skills.
Yet, the crowd is lurking around those housefull theatres , orgasming to buy even the tickets sold in black.

Yes, there are so many mirrors
Yet, no one shows the exact me.!

Author's Note

I appreciate you coming all the way down to where it ends

Reviews

[ANTO]

I had to come to the bottom - I didnt know where else to look for the end Fatty.

"The floor of the tongue and the cavities around would serve as a beautiful picnic spot." - haha - we eat on average six spiders in a lifetime while we sleep anyways - free protein shakes.

Love that word 'boodle' - had to do some serious looking up for that one and Im keeping for myself - other readers can go look themselves ;p

Its hard to keep our gob shut sometimes and the mask we wear (for we all do - and all wear different ones - anyone who says they don't is not being honest with themselves) is de rigeur for living but it also means we are - like Darth Vader and his artifical life-system support - mostly dead.

Thought provoking (L-o-o-o-o-on-g) write my friend. Thanks for sharing this one. :)

[fattycbreezy52]

Haha I know it's long but sometimes when those ideas torment your mind in one go at some point, you can't just resist.You clearly know I just write when I really feel the urge to do so, like most of us out here.
And your review. I literally couldn't suppress my laughter.
Thanks for such lovely piece of review, in return!

[ANTO]

I wasnt phased by the length of it Fatty, Im just joking with you. I have read and published pieces as long if not longer. Dont take any heed of my ribbing you. I dint mean anything by it but friendly banter.

[fattycbreezy52]

Yeah..I am the last person you would expect to mind and get disturbed upon your soft teasing and bantering. it's cool with me Anto.I love cool people and you're one of them. I appreciate the frank nature which hardly a few have.Always be yourself and please never change. .Keep rocking:);)

[Einstein Noodle]

dear fatty ... such a drawing in you have written .. i have to come back and read again ... your style and dimension is dark and intoxicating ... so much there ... i have to read again ;)
E.

[fattycbreezy52]

I am glad.You are welcome at any point of time. Thanks a lot:)

[Einstein Noodle]

your description of the facade in the first verse is so graphic .. we do protect our costumes at any expense some times ..love these lines:
"Questions erase the remaining memory and propagate a situation of being seized upon at midnight. "

"The floor of the tongue and the cavities around would serve as a beautiful picnic spot."

intelligent satirical psychology impregnates your metaphors .. i am challenged and exposed at the same time .. have put this one in the library .. seems to come from a deep self introspection ... not easy to be so brutally honest :) well done says i!
E.

[fattycbreezy52]

This is such an amazing review.I am glad you took the time to a analyse it deeply.This really means a lot.Thanks for your amazing words.Keeps me encouraged:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This a such a profound and engaging piece FCB! It is well articulated and is intelligent as it causes the reader to question. It has such thought provoking images in its metaphors.

A couple of very MINOR suggestions:

Playing with a 20 buck knife (plural not needed)
They write welcome on every house mat (plural not needed) and
The final line:

Yet, no one shows their true face!

[fattycbreezy52]

Aha! ! Thanks for such a constructive review. Means a lot;)

[Michael Wright]

I like this piece and your free style is quite good.

[fattycbreezy52]

Yes it's my first preference. Thanks!:)

[dan]

fcb, First of all I don't know how you can state in your profile that you can't express yourself--I look at the piece above and think you've expressed very well your feelings and ideas. So many excellent turns of phrases in this one, and I don't usually like quoting from a piece when I review, but this one: "What if the mouth remains open serving as an outlet for those bloodsucking mosquitoes to come and go. The floor of the tongue and the cavities around would serve as a beautiful picnic spot..." is too good NOT to quote it. You've got a lot of talent, young lady...it's time you realize that and give yourself all due credit. Thank you for sharing this with all of us. take care...dan

[fattycbreezy52]

Omg! your review just made my day. Seriously!
Thank you so much for the review. Atleast there are still some people who can conveniently catch the significance of what I express. The fact that you appreciated this thing of mine is the greatest.
Thanks Dan.Keep smiling:)

[dan]

What, now I'm supposed to smile TOO? 8^) There...dan

[fattycbreezy52]

Yes...it burns a lot of calories I guess but still can make you a bit fat.
See whatever be the case, it is the best when it comes to giving a great angle to our faces; )

[fattycbreezy52]

Yes...it burns a lot of calories I guess but still can make you a bit fat.
See whatever be the case, it is the best when it comes to giving a great angle to our faces; )