Bronze Semblance

Let me dance upon your miraculous recovery,

Let me sleep upon your discovery of perfection...

Smile my way for I saw your skins,

Shedding to the floor like yesterday's sin's,

Let me wax the floors where you've fallen to cry,

And let me cherish the bronze beneath your eyes

On the moment where you fall down to die~~~

The bronze semblance of a letter

You thought you'd leave me to make it all better

Proves to me the glimmer of your heart exists

In a place your blithely words have never allowed an emotion

To be dismissed...

Gone, are you? Here, are you?

Nowhere, nowhere to be found, nothing to

Construe.

Reviews

[Ruth]

Sweetheart, I adore this....powerfully worded and emotive....tear inducing actually! xx

[Kiri Nells]

Beautifully done. Great write! Lots of nice vocab words in there. :)
99/100

[Lilly Negoi]

"the glimmer of your heart exists
In a place your blithely words have never allowed an emotion
To be dismissed..."
quite a hidden place...

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and good journey into powerful words. I love the use of language and the visions you have create with your words. The ending was very good. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[HopelesslyDevoted]

gorgeous writing as always, this is a great addition to your fine collection of poetry!

[☯]

I really loved the imagery and semblance in this poem. The flow is nice, and the words are thoughtful.
"Let me wax the floors where you've fallen to cry,
And let me cherish the bronze beneath your eyes"
I really liked these two lines. Great write. Magnificent :)

[Melissa]

Smile my way for I saw your skins,
Shedding to the floor like yesterday's sin's,
Are my two favorite lines from this poem:)

[Lily Mae]

"Smile my way for I saw your skins,
Shedding to the floor like yesterday's sin's,
Let me wax the floors where you've fallen to cry"
I so smiled as I read this..it's brilliant.. I love it... and I'm glad you sent me a request..
Sounds like there was nothing to be found after all ;) xxx love it..x