Imperfect

We're imperfect,

We're spreading scarlet like the drops of blood that paint these fingernails.

I dig my fingers into the ground, and

Crack.

Perfection loses its breath,

A wish of yours and a wish of mine amidst the thunders of

Evening's forever,

My senses of togetherness

Rains.

(Do you feel that?)

We're imperfect,

We're spreading scarlet

Like the drops of tears that wash away these grounds.

Only a shape of our emotion

Stays behind,

(Do you see that?)

Love never claimed to be,

But I held it between my layers of soft skin 

Like an onion in a blizzard, to dust the skies.

Perfection?

Reviews

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-..]

Ellen Hopkins, one of my favorite authors . . . And I think you and her should sit down for tea sometime. (: Nice job! Keep up the good work!

[Just Me]

I loved how this poem was set up. It flowed nicely! Great work!

[Brette Medb]

Love never claimed to be,
But I held it between my layers of soft skin
Like an onion in a blizzard, to dust the skies.
Perfection?

I love this. I also liked how you set the poem up, it gave it it's own unique feel. Excellent.


B

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

So true my friend, no body really is perfect because we live in an imperfect world. Excellent poem.

[Ashley]

Full of emotional, very meaning and beautiful

[compositionc]

So emotionally full.
Every word has a meaning.
Great work.

[Lilly Negoi]

loved the last stanza!!! painfully tender and delicate!

[☯]

Such a deep and descriptive poem. The picture also goes perfectly with it. Excellent write. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Perfection loses its breath,
A wish of yours and a wish of mine amidst the thunders of
Evening's forever,"
The poem is amazing. I had to read a few times. Love is imperfect till we learn the true emotion and touch of love. I like the ending to this poem. Great wisdom in this outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[sentimental~ galore]

Deep and positive expression. well thought out and felt.