Breakthrough

Where flaming crimson grasped at the skies, 

Where chocolate funnel clouds ached to remain,

Where faint blue canals trembled with forgotten

Streams of glass,

Now, dear soul of chalky incense, 

Now, we say goodbye to yesterday,

Characters sing.

Sunlight blazes inward toward the eyes of "stay",

And flaring the

Sparks of "go".

They walk the beach line, one time,

They walk the horizon, one night.

They smell the torched phenomenon,

Lighting up the tomorrows 

That they'll never bring.

They trigger the enzymes of the world, 

Trilling into nightfall, like bullets,

Fragments of rituals they'll never foresee.

They kiss the lightning,

Bolting to misery,

They fly in open airs, as if they were given the sky

In which to confide.

Orange embers tint the frail picture,

Blaming the wind for its faults, and

Into moonlight,

The colors descend;

It’s a breakthrough of

timbers.

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Fantastic! Great images, metaphors, pure emotions.. I really like this piece

[HopelesslyDevoted]

super awesome!

[Erinne S.]

This was a fantastic piece! I found it very powerful and descriptive and it drew me in. It was a stirring piece and I love when writing can do that to a reader.

Very good job and keep at it!

[Derek S.Keck]

No matter what tone you set your poem or whatever meaning you come to convey, it shows how much soul you invest in your writing and the strength of the personal meaning. That’s why your poetry is so relevant and likable, because you've made it your own.

[EmeraldFacet]

I very much enjoyed your visual descriptions- it really personifies the work.
Great write! :)

[Lily Mae]

I loved the way you described all the emotions involved.. The kissing lightening was a brilliant thought.. I loved it.. Your an amazing poet and I never tire of reading your work... xx

[Just Me]

Wow this was very... descriptive. I really liked. It was filled with emotion but it didn't exactly show it if that makes any sense. Like you could tell there was a lot of emotion but there weren't a lot of words telling that the emotions are there. It was good.