Breakthrough

Where flaming crimson grasped at the skies, 

Where chocolate funnel clouds ached to remain,

Where faint blue canals trembled with forgotten

Streams of glass,

Now, dear soul of chalky incense, 

Now, we say goodbye to yesterday,

Characters sing.

Sunlight blazes inward toward the eyes of "stay",

And flaring the

Sparks of "go".

They walk the beach line, one time,

They walk the horizon, one night.

They smell the torched phenomenon,

Lighting up the tomorrows 

That they'll never bring.

They trigger the enzymes of the world, 

Trilling into nightfall, like bullets,

Fragments of rituals they'll never foresee.

They kiss the lightning,

Bolting to misery,

They fly in open airs, as if they were given the sky

In which to confide.

Orange embers tint the frail picture,

Blaming the wind for its faults, and

Into moonlight,

The colors descend;

It’s a breakthrough of

timbers.

Reviews

[Kiri Nells]

So poetic (not just because it's a poem)! I love this! Great write!

[☯]

"Where flaming crimson grasped at the skies,
Where chocolate funnel clouds ached to remain"

This poem is a lovely blast of description in my mind. Magnificent writing. :)

[Judy Ponceby]

Lovely description, flows very well :)

[Abbie]

very descriptive and i love the way it flows great write :)

[compositionc]

Argh...this was so amazing. I keep thinking about the descriptions. You paint a picture in my mind.
Fantastic poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Description made the words come alive. Every line adding to the strength of this poem. The poem made me desire a day watching the day fall into night by the peaceful ocean. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Lilly Negoi]

ahhh what an abundance of imagery here...i cannot make up my mind on what i like better, the "soul of chalky incense", the "torched phenomenon" or the "orange embers [...] blaming the wind"...

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Love your words you use, painting pictures in the mind for the world to see.

[A.Noel]

paints such a beautiful picture in the mind. I just love it :)