Fatal symphonies

Barbed wire traces the unloved, Death deceives like the devil's hot breath,

Raspberry sweetness chills the tips of our tongues, oh no, don't land

upon the angel's tough virtues,

(like glassy wings that never land her feet

to the ground.)

Her nails grasp tightly but she never

has gleamed a different shade of rainbow,

bright blackness of blues, or satin gleaming greys...

 A lovely fog shimmers behind her lips,

As if the world spins her breath 

Her perilous lust for words...

   her dangerous melodies ring faintly...

(Her words fly with freedom,

orderless and obtained by the exhales 

of the winds)

A clarity of wind chimes ding so finely,                           a lovely chasm of voices, hers...

breaking her screams into soft melodies                         lacy velveteen confinements,

Why don't you  sing with her,

{Why don't you} sing with her

As she flies,

spreading her wings to be Free...

Don't you see? ...must you look?

She's a beauty, --soulless, 

empty-- All in herself,

Can't you see, A silent abyss,

how she's free Of her blazing colors,

....your touch, your voice,

your existence is 

aching with her at free fall,

She's a woven verse of a song, She's a fatal symphony

Reviews

[Alana Michele]

Love the style! great use of words.

[Icarus Thoreau]

Fantastic use of format.

[Ravyne Hawke]

Oh the beauty of treebranching or webbing.. thoughts that cascade like a pearl necklace. You've captured the essence of a melody here, as you say, "a fatal symphony". This is definitely one of my favorites.

[Just Me]

That was awesome. I loved how the title matched your screen name. The format that it was written in really caught my eye. I was really intersting. Good read.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

the format caught my eye and made me interested to read this. and it was worth it, the flow was perfect, the subject intriguing, and the word was sublime! great work!

[Kiri Nells]

The way the structure is so original and creative just adds to the feeling this gives. You used some great emotion in this and I love it. Great write!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Your thoughts are like a rainbow of colour, expressed for the reader to gaze at in wonder. Beautifully done my friend.

[A.Noel]

I love the way you arrange the words, it reminds me of all the old poets I studied in American Lit. You took the art a step beyond just simply coming up with words to express yourself, and used the arrangement as well. Good work =)

[Also known as Clare.]

[sentimental~ galore]

Its almost like numerous amounts of thoughts threaded into one poetry piece. An outstanding description.