Retracing

Retracing

A Poem by fatalsymphonies

Fairy sweets and key lime scents,
oh the luring of this just never relents.
I couldn't fathom your harbored ambrosial taste from behind your lips,
like strips of candied flavour that I mustn't taste~
How do you close your eyes and breathe when you exist this way,
with an exhaling swirl that swallows the rest of the world whole?

I pretend I don't dream of your touch,
the edge that prevents, I pretend, oh I believe, you don't pretend,
I pretend you don't remember those nights with me.

You do as you did, you do as you will,
but your fluttering lashes pulled you into sleep,
my name the last to caress the surface of your thoughts
every night~

Sparkling candid paths your toes must trace,
aching the words you'll never fail to throw like needles toward a face,
savoring the foamy indifference that rests on your tongue,
like sugar cubes dissipating in the melting precious words you'll never speak.

As you face the collisions of our worlds, begging for a reprieve,
I caress your hands in a fathomable dream of yours, and you surrender,
just for a moment I'll beg you, of your name and your soul's past melodies,
memories,
to retrace, just once
the strips of sugared bitter fruity candies
you promised never to return to...

but as I touch your fingers, I feel the tiny cubes of grained sugar
licking the smooth edges of your skin.

© 2011 fatalsymphonies


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Stunned. Another perfect poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I was swept away by this one.

Posted 13 Years Ago


That flowed wonderfully. Everything seemed to just come together. That was totally amazing. It was greatly expressed, worded, and enjoyed.

Posted 13 Years Ago



Sparkling candid paths your toes must trace,
aching the words you'll never fail to throw like needles toward a face,
savoring the foamy indifference that rests on your tongue,
like sugar cubes dissipating in the melting precious words you'll never speak.

simply luscious words of restlessness! beautiful job with this! it left me completely speachless! but I enjoyed reading every bit of it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Lovely images....well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


You slammed this one (in my opinion) in the ending. "but as I touch your fingers, I feel the tiny cubes of grained sugar
licking the smooth edges of your skin."
I really love this..playful, fun, a need for love and candy..who could want more:) x

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love the playfulness of the poem. There's a brightness to it--a vividness. You want to indulge in all the sweetness and comforting images you pepper throughout the poem, but you know that there's something more. There's a longing underneath the sweet surface. A longing for that something that you know you shouldn't want but some part of you--of all of us--cannot live without.

Posted 13 Years Ago


The sweetest tasting kiss is the one we relish, and anticipating the electricity of a desired touch. Another good poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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