Oh, the rain

How long shall we stay, love?

The rain's pouring down ever so lightly

pressing shards of glass into our backs

one by one and slowly at that,

how long did you say?

{I'd stay here forever if you asked me to,

The rain feels like showers of my love for you,

showers I'll never get the chance to feel again.}

How long will you hold me here, dearest?

The lightness has rained rainbows of lust, you know,

pouring the words from my eyes as if tears escaped,

but it's just the rain, I know it's just the rain.

{Why do you shield my eyes from the lightning, precious?

Why do you cup your hands over my ears to break up the thunder?

Why do you smile lightly, when you know it only hurts me?}

How much longer will we drench ourselves in rain, darling?

Do you feel the same feeling as I do, when you stare into my eyes?

Do you feel the same feeling as I do, like the world threatens to consume you,

but you'll do anything but allow it, when you're standing here with me

In the rain?

{My clothes are wetting down further, sweetheart,

I don't know how much longer we can stay, before the waters sparkle further,

and show you my broken heart you're not supposed to see,

but you knew didn't you? You knew from whens we came.}

Reviews

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Read it again, I do like this.

[Sunni Davis]

I love the emotions running through this. I love the dreamy feeling of a rainy day and you've captured that perfectly here. Great job!

[sarah]

This is amazing it really portrade some great emotion wonderful work

[Lily Mae]

Well my favorites are love and using the elements.. So to me this is a beauty. :) x

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

To make love in the rain, beautiful poem.

[Derek S.Keck]

Beautiful.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

the strength in this poem is immeasurable its amazing! fantastic work!

[BrightEyes]

"You knew from whens we came". Whens = whence :)

There is something about this piece. There is that conversation going on within it that falls just short of explaining everything that is going on. It teases the mind with shadow dances just outside its grasp, making one's imagination take flight and bring its own nuances into it. I like pieces that make my mind wake up and inspire creativity to bloom.