Between the lines

Today is just another day,

--It's like a giant hole of collision, (without you in it)
inviting my every emotion to crash and burn--

begging for a pen to write in words, other than in blood.
Water, please sir, water to match the depths of painted eyes.

--Dear you, (I'll never send this)
I'm digging my nails into my palm to keep from screaming.--

Is it my imagination, or is the air so thick that it clogs within my lungs?
A blockage of continuation, my knees have never been so hollow,
I collapse to the floors of my skins.

--I can no longer mirror my pain on my face to translate,
for you must (I'm begging) do this on your own.--

Do you feel better now, do you allow yourself to breathe?
cleaning my imperfections like the soft tongues of momma bathing her young,
Hidden behind anger, do you shift underneath?
and how about watching me heal my wounds
with words you'll never speak again?

--I swear (between the lines) it feels like all eyes are on me,
Where are you?--

Reviews

[Just Me]

Very interseting. I never looked at it from that perspective. Excellent. Wonderful. Beautiful. Great Job.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting poem. I like how you set-up each set of lines. Making each one important with a different point to be made. Needing and waiting for someone can make us crazy. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[LovelySparrow]

Such a beautifully written piece, I can just feel the retorical questions ripping at my mind. The structure is interesting and just demands my attention. Wonderful!

[biib]

I'm hesitating on what to respond with.

This soliloquy really exemplifies internal confliction.
I adore the sentence structure and the rhetorical strategie used.
It provokes me to question myself.
It demands of me -to feel the idea and depth of what your trying to testify.

One of my favorites. so passionate.

[Silence]

Awesome work! I've gotta say that my favorite line is, "begging for a pen to write in words, other than in blood." Keep it up!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

This is a favourite.

[Derek S.Keck]

You write from the depths of the heart.

[sarah]

So powerful!!! wow I am so moved

[Lily Mae]

I feel like the the one lost still eats away at who you are.. penetrating all barriers..
And that your exhausted and don't have the strength to allow them to feed on you any more.. and yet your wondering "where are you?" Maybe I'm wrong but that's what I took from in between the lines ;) xx

[Judy Ponceby]

Many images you have here are very moving. I do have a hard time following this I'm not sure if it is me or that I am just not certain what the pain is caused by. "I collapse to the floors of my skins.", I don't quite grasp. The next to last stanza I find very intriguing, making me wonder what has happened to the writer. Thank you for sharing :)