Bring It Back

Each night they call to have that one fleeting moment back.
The tears plead to rescind the words that altered everything.
Small seemingly harmless words knifed through us both and tore our bond away.
Ten tiny seconds severed the peace, our strength, stealing our whole lives.
Shared sadness, happiness, secrets, and hopes wiped clean with a few turns of the tongue.
My skin and bones, my entire being calls to the stars to steal that second back, to change the end and return to the chapters of our time together.
Yet, it won't and never will.
You're lost to me forever, and no words I strive to conjure for the rest of time will bring you back.
The truth will never again leave my lips.
Nothingness pervades in darkness cloaked with numbing daggers and it starts to feel like home.

Reviews

[Stephen]

"Seemed like a great Philosophy of love!!"

The hopeless tears always rescind the words --- unspoken words to alter the things which`re undone in this wicked picked sicked and freaked world -- with or --- without being loved. Nice write, i`m gonna look forward to reading your stuffs!!

[Kristen Swan]

Wow, thanks so much for this generous review!

[guy drori]

Very nice Kristen !
Glad I read it....

[Jimmy Yetts]

Profound regrets at hasty speech.
Sad that words spoken in anger often convey the opposite of what we truly feel--almost as if we're trying to loudly deny something we see as weakness.
A very fine offering, Kristen!

[Gee]

A row,truths told,(usually drink fuelled)and then the recriminations and the start of the end.Really liked this.

[Kristen Swan]

:) I'm glad you liked it.

[Gee]

And I'm glad you're glad I liked it.

[Vaibhav Singh Thakur]

Wow! you have described the depth through few words and that is really admirable. Keep rocking :)

[Kristen Swan]

Thanks :) that was my goal

[Blogger]

I read this over several times in order to 'get it'. LOL Does that mean this is a) deep and full of feelings I can relate to, or b) too hard for me to really grasp in the first place.

I havent decided yet.

[Kristen Swan]

Lol A for sure! I guess when I write I try to conceal what I'm feeling at times, so that it's not always obvious or can be interpreted in different ways. But most of my writing is something everyone can relate to in some way.

[Blogger]

You are doing well here. Keep it up!

[Kristen Swan]

Thanks! I'm really trying.

[FireFox9]

Well done, very emotional as well. Keep getting better Fox-

[Kristen Swan]

Thank you. I am working on it.

[C. Rose]

You've portrayed the intense longing to go back to a better time well.
I liked the flip at the end "and it starts to feel like home"

In my opinion "it won't and it never will" tripped me up. "it won't and never will" flows better (in my opinion which you are free to ignore as it is your poem)

[Kristen Swan]

Thanks so much for the praise and constructive criticism. I agree that does flow better! Thanks for taking the time to review this.

[lissalovesyou]

Wow. This is such a tragedy, especially since it was just a few words that ruined it all. How often we regret what we said.
" Small seemingly harmless words knifed through us both and tore our bond away.
Ten tiny seconds severed the peace, our strength, stealing our whole lives.
Shared sadness, happiness, secrets, and hopes wiped clean with a few rolls of the tongue. "
I loved those lines. Perfect.
lissalovesyou:)

[Kristen Swan]

I appreciate the commendation. Thank you. :)

[lissalovesyou]

You deserve it.
lissalovesyou:)