Useless without you

Can you feel your heart beat? no? but your soul-mate surely can

If I am the pen you're the ink

If I am an eye you have to blink

You're the petrol if I'm the car

So without you I can't go any far

If your the nail polish, I'm the nail

So you will make my life colorful without fail

If my sky has dark clouds your the blazing sun

Your my soul, so without you nothing can be done

You're the award if I win a race

Nothing's greater than your magical face

If I'm the swan your the lake

Without you I am so fake

If i'm the dirt you're the bin

If I make mistakes, its your sin

I can breathe because your the nose

What's the fun if there is no thorns in rose?

If I'm in dark you are the light

So without there is no need of eye-sight

Author's Note

I wrote this five six years ago, when I was just 10. Please give your reviews!!!!

Reviews

[terry smith]

For a 10 year old this is very good!when I was ten my mom was trying to get me not to eat crayons!!lol I always read what I write to myself a couple of times to make sure the flow is there, that is my advise:)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

It's hard to find poetry that is neat
Yet which sweeps you of your feet:P

Just rhyming:P

Very good if written at the age of 10:)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank u so much

[SmittyJas]

Poetry 101 group contest of Leave comment and tag Your It

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

ok.................

[SmittyJas]

Very insightful for the age of ten you use a fine pen. I want to include you it the contest of Poetry It. Your in the Group Poetry 101 and your It. Now you must read and comment on another member of poetry 101 member's poem and Keep the chain going. You write nice poetry Enjoyed the read.

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

ok...thank you so much!!

[armin]

You're the award if I win a race
Nothing's greater than your magical face
If I'm the swan your the lake
Without you I am so fake
Those lines were nicely penned. I enjoyed every bit of this write. Much devoted.
But I could find a minor error. Nail paints is not a good example, it can't colour the life ,it fades easily.
My mom use that. LoL..... Making rhymes is important writing a poem but not to an extent it loose its meaning.
Otherwised your poem is great. Keep writing.

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

It depends on the person sometimes. I feel that colorful nails are better and ironically i compared my lover with nail-polish becuz he surely made my life colorful . One thing I've learned in my 16 yrs old life that write what you feel and I'm doing that. Thanks for your review :)

[armin]

precisely ,its always better and easy to listen yourself and ignoring others.

[maria ( rose)]

You're the petrol if I'm the car
So without you I can't go any far
Love it !!

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[maria ( rose)]

you're welcome:)

[Marie]

THis is cute and good for a ten year old.

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much. I appreciate you liked it!

[Tasfia Islam]

Awesome....:)
If your the nail polish, I'm the nail
So you will make my life colorful without fail
loved these lines.....

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much sweetie