crumpled love

everyone single or in a relationship once loved to fall in love and hated to say good-bye. tear drops can be rubbed off but pain cannot. The scar remains

I looked at you and couldn't take my eyes off you

You were special and inside you there is something new

I took a pen and jotted down a rhyme

I started enjoying the sunset for the first time

I missed you like the sun misses the moon in the morning sky

I cried out of happiness till my tears were dry

I loved horror films because your love haunted my life

We imagined our future together and said we will built our own hive

Whenever you spoke I gazed at your lips

When I faced harsh reality, I prayed so that your love never flips

I stopped eating chocolate because your love was more sweet

At night, I stared at nothing but could hear the morning birds tweet

I just wanted to keep your face etched in my mind

But every-time I looked at it I got lost and became blind

When my heart skipped a beat, I knew something was not right

My tears prevented my eyes to close at night

Without any reason I looked at the phone

When I was sad I wanted to hear a particular tone

I stared at a blank sheet 

And ignored the scorching heat

But distance crawled in and crumpled our love

I hoped your love wouldn't fly away like a dove

I had daydreams and nightmares at night

Because I was afraid of loosing you after our big fight

Author's Note

reviews plz

Reviews

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

cool, about the daydreams at night, I didn't think about that, but it is possible to daydream at night, it's so messed up but then so passionate as well

so classic and love story, sincere as well

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

Actually I mean to say I have nightmares at night and also daydream. It should have been clearer. thank u so much

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

that's so sweet too to build your own hive, like the birds and the bees, to imagine oneself as a bee buzzing about in a hive with another bee? very interesting and dear, childlike I guess is a better word

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much. I really appreciate you liked it

[DoormanDan]

There is nothing bad about this poem whatsoever! I loved the line I loved horror films because your love haunted my life. AWESOME.

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[David Ung]

great job. described love really well through this poem

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

That's one of the fears people have. The fear of losing one's love. Love is a strong feeling and it takes our heart as our mind. Strong fealings. Keep writing. :)
Rudi

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

It's my pleasure, beautiful picture you have chosen to go with you poem. :)
Rudi

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

I just love couples they are filled with love and everything that is sweet. thank you :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Me too, but the scenery, the beach and the sea and the sun that flows around that couple, good choice. :)
Rudi

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thanks a lot

[free will]

You go the rhythm in this piece that you were looking for...good job:)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[Jen]

This poem is pretty with its visible meaning about love and life... How harsh can love be if it can be soft...How life moves the way it has to without your permission... The poem shows the sadness of a lover while remembering his beloved...The poem is excellent in rhyming scheme...Thanks for sharing this brilliant piece of yours here...Keep it up!

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

precisely! you got the message I wanted to share through this poem.. thanks alot

[Jen]

You're Welcome!